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@daeus
Well, big thoughts is mainly that you should take out the last paragraph, because although you’re trying to appeal with struggles like that, people might not want to think of themselves as weak or cowardly, if you know what I mean. Maybe they know that subconsciously, but who wants to admit that they are a coward? I mean, a Christian might…[Read more]

@jess-penrose XD Yeah, that’s my thoughts. 😀 You might have noticed I have very strong opinions on these things. 😛

@Dragon-Snapper *scowls* We are not taking over the kingdom.

@xonos-darkgrate as someone who has read and reread this story, I can assure you it’s anything but simple. In many ways it’s a lot like most classical literature— the premise it’s built on is very basic, almost simple, and yet when you read the story it’s nothing you ever would have guessed.

@rolena-hatfield I love your blog! Your Attic looks so nice!

@rolena-Hatfield – I love it! And I love the name 🙂

Hi @raevynstar and welcome to KP! 🙂

Hi @kballen and welcome to KP 🙂 I hope you enjoy it here!

@daeus – great synopsis. I agree with @kate-flournoy about the first sentence. It seemed a little too long; not attention-grabbing enough..:)

And I liked the way @salome01w4g reworded your last paragraph.

Personally, I think it just needs a little bit of rewording; in places it’s kind of long and doesn’t seem quite “powerful” enough, but oth…[Read more]

@kate-flournoy He forgot to tag me too. Can we take over the kingdom now? How bout now? Now?
@daeus Well…do you want my big thoughts or little thoughts?

@Daeus *sniffs* You forgot to tag me.
But looks like I’m first to the party anyway, so here goes. XD

First off, I really like it. The only suggestions I have are a few tweaks to the wording.

The first line, I think, would be better as simply ‘Trevor is in a mess. After traveling back in time, he and his sister are now…’ etc. It leaves out…[Read more]

@raevynstar Hello there! Glad you found us! If you have any questions about KP, the forums, or whatever, feel free to ask anyone!

@raevynstar Welcome to KP! Where do you live?

@xonos-darkgrate

Yes, humans. Those are the biggest monsters possible for a good story!

That is a huge truth. Humans will ALWAYS be more interesting to read about than any kind of creature. Whether they’re good or bad. 😛

@xonos-darkgrate @that_writer_girl_99 I’ll be praying for both of y’all.

@that_writer_girl_99 will continue. 😉

Hello everyone! I’m taking a midterm for my hardest class tomorrow afternoon and I’m really, really nervous. I’ve been studying for a while now but I’m still terrified I won’t pass…can y’all pray for me? @shannon @dragon-snapper @winter-rose @daeus @kate-flournoy

@ingridrd I like your character’s name. 🙂 Do you have a title for your WIP?

@aratrea XD Perfect.

@raevynstar *nods* Totally valid reason. 😉

@Rolena-Hatfield that’s awesome! I like the color scheme. 😀