GodlyFantasy12

@ellette-giselle

Thanks for the thoughts! I’ll definitely try to work that in.

Yw!

AHHH!!! I forgot to tag people on this new section! I was wondering why no one said anything!!! I’ll just re-post this whole thing.

You’re alright, I still get notifs by email even when people don’t tag me. I read it 👍

@ellette-giselle

yes!! Fire away!! I’m ready for it now! I think I’m prepared for people to criticize Aaron.

Okay!! So this isn’t a critique of Aaron himself, like ‘ohyouhavetochangehim.’ It’s for you to improve his arc.

Aaron begins to verbally doubt God during the siege. But his very first act was trusting God to lead him into a dangerous kin…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Oh no! I’ll be praying for you. Is there any specific way I can be doing that?

I’m doing okay lol, thanks for the offer! I caught the dreaded senioritis in my junior year and I just don’t want to return to school. I’ve had symptoms of depression since a year ago and… Blegh… I don’t know what to do about it.

On the bright s…[Read more]

@rae

I would encourage you to play around with it and see what you like. This is a first or second draft, so I wouldn’t worry too much about the POVs being in the right place.

But yeah, I really like what Calyhuge suggested. Sometimes you just have to write and figure it out as well. Definitely write from both POVs in this part of the draft, t…[Read more]

@loopylin

@I’mtooselfconsioustoactullytagpeople

but what about meeeeee

XD I love seeing your art! Also, those sketches are super cute.

And you’re so good at drawing toes. They are the bane of my existence.

@ellette-giselle

AGREED!

XD

Some completely positive notes <3

1. Your writing output is still so prolific, that’s great!! Most writers slow down towards the middle of a story, including myself.

2. I enjoy the king character. He seems like a straightforward, honorable guy who might be a tad prideful but still attempting to be a leader. He shouldn’t die. Nor should Sabina.…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I’m still following! Sorry, I was actually having a rough time the same week, so I took a break from KP. 😅 I will probably continue to spend time away from here due to senior projects.

So, I do have more Aaron notes since you started exploring his trust issues. They are on the constructive side of things. I want to make sure you…[Read more]

I’ve always struggled with drawing a cartoon version of myself but now I have to XD

@loopylin

You and the stuffy are so cuuuuuuute!! Ack!! ❤️🥺 I picture you similarly to this. The pastels are so you. 

I might join this despite my art requests page XD

Heeyy, I have more feedback whenever you want it 😛

@rae

I second @ellette-giselle, but I would probably make the larger portion of it Mandin’s, and then a shorter scene/s from Nahim’s point of view. Being inside the mind of a character who’s depressed and delirious can be disorienting (wow, alliteration there lol.) Except if the rest of the book is from Nahim’s POV–then, it might be better just…[Read more]

 

Hi Min!

Yes, Thankfully I have found it the same here! For me I used to not really speak what I thought when asked. I would just shrug or brush it aside, but I started feeling guilty about it. I came to the place where I knew I needed top say what I really believed. So I did. And the first time I did I was nearly blown to pieces with the…

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@ellette-giselle

I hope you don’t mind me reading your conversation above lol

Man it sounds like you’ve had kind of a rough time in the past with sharing opinions ect. People on Kp are pretty good with not being ‘reactive’ if you know what I mean. Like when you’re talking abt politics and the other person starts raising their voice, cutting you…[Read more]

Idk if this will help, but since rivals are basically competing to be the best at something, I like to give them some similar traits, but also some strikingly different traits. This way they end up competing in a “similarity” but the reason for competition is a “difference.”

Two superheroes who are Fire and Water personalities, and both believe…[Read more]