GodlyFantasy12

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@jonas

Yeeah

Don’t even ask about the time. Idk why it looks like that XDD

Most users ever online was 13 on December 22, 2023 9:52 pm

Almost there guyssss

@savannah_grace2009

I mean…it depends on what you mean by the inciting incident….I’m new to plotting XD In a way, Neveah being pregnant is the inciting incident, because it triggers a chain reaction that basically turns Sef’s world upside-down. If that makes sense. I’m not sure about if it is the inciting incident or not….but it is definitely so…

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Dis is gonna be a breeze 😎

@acancello

You’re not the only one! We eat at 5 too, lol.

@mineralizedwritings

Oh yeah, that’s something I easily forget about. Thanks for reminding me! I’ll definitely keep that in mind as I write and edit. 😊

@esther-c

Huh, I’ve never really thought of it that way before, but I think that’s the aspect of their relationship that I play off of in the second book to create more conflict. Man, I am going to be pondering over this all day. XD

XD glad I could make you think! It might be a good source of conflict for book 2, but I think it would be great if…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Alrighty! Here we go!

1. Is it boring?? I’ve been really scared that this doesn’t draw you in and isn’t interesting.

Um, I wouldn’t say it’s boring. I think the pacing is pretty good. Honestly, boring is so subjective, so no, it’s not boring. Because I don’t mind things moving a little slower at the beginning. Some people m…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Yep!

Awesome!

Ev is obviously pretty reckless. He doesn’t seem to care about getting into danger, and I’m not really sure to describe his personality but he seems playful?

And Ami is sweet and responsible. She really cares about Ev and wants to protect him.

I think you just nailed them both in a few sentences. XD That’s exactly what…[Read more]

@rae

I may answer all your questions later, but for now, I am drawn into the story.

Alrighty, awesome! 👍

I see potential for this story to be better if you had at least one chapter before this that introduced us to daily life with the Orb. It would drawn me in more, and make us care about Ev and Ami more than just plopping them and the plot in our…

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@mineralizedwritings

Thank you so much Esther! I’ve been doubting my writing recently and really comparing myself to others, so it makes me happy you like it. I started writing in present tense as soon as I started writing, so after the initial hurdle (it was hard lol, I kept using said) it’s been pretty natural, because I don’t know how write…

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@jonas

I’m EST, so rn, 5 is a hit or miss for me. But I’ll try my best to show up.

@loopylin

Well PppppPpPfffffffffff

Goodness

I’m just trying to protEct the babies; what if you were going to traumatize them with some tragic events? Now they’ll be stuck safely in KP limbo forever.

@loopylin

XD Sorrryyyyy

@rae

Hugo

“I wish. Unfortunately my baby brother? Seb? He was the second to discover how people change. It depends on your long-term mental state, not whatever you want. And most of the time, these changes slowly intensify your worst beliefs… To use his words.”

They stood still now. Hugo hooked his thumbs in his…[Read more]

@rae

Hugo

Realn sounded like a fairy story.

“…Here I am talking so much! What of your culture?” Nar laughed, her curls thrown around her face, like a windswept flower.

She looked like a fairy too. Just a little.

“My culture?” Hugo blinked, and hesitated. “Um… let’s see.”

Nar probably thought he was looking for words. She stared up at him…[Read more]

@trailblazer

Aw me too! That was so funny XD