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@inkling-for-christ  Everything that the course teaches about showing and the techniques to use it more effectively, for example, body language, can be transferred into first person just by changing what the character says, for example

“I walked down the hall slowly, feeling nervous (telling)

would change to

“I shuffled down the hall, my hands…[Read more]

@winter-rose I like the new one! It read a lot smoother than the first, and I wasn’t confused. I don’t think you need the extra line; it adds too much info.

I really don’t see anything else I would change. *thumbs up*

@winter-rose I like it overall, but I’m confused on a couple of points.

First of all, the reason he doesn’t want to guard Amy… from the first line, it seems that he doesn’t like the Slate family. From the second line, it seems that he specifically doesn’t like Amy. From the third line it seems that he just doesn’t like girls in general.…[Read more]

@mariposa Impressive! I’ve never even gotten a gingerbread house to stand up, let alone look that good!

@inkling-for-christ

*squints*

Did @daeus put you up to this to get free advertising?

Nah, just kidding! 😉

Yes, I got the email, but I haven’t had a chance to do the course yet. From your stellar recommendation, though, I definitely will do it soon. One of my weaknesses is relying on telling, especially when I’m writing in third person.

@sam-kowal Yeah… Luke mentioned that Kylo took some of his students without killing them, so I wonder what happened to them? Is he training them in the dark side?

@inkling-for-christ

😀 I got the same email

Stan and I got the course, too

I’m really liking it so far

I’ve watched about half of Part 1

All I can say is, @daeus thanks for making such a good learning tool available for free, and great job

@winter-rose XD This sounds really funny

I’m guessing Rook is actually an alternate version of Sam, from another dimension?

I don’t have much experience with blurbs, but I like this one. It seems slightly long, like the others are saying.

“A different bodyguard would give anything to protect a member of the Slate family.

Not Rook. Not if his…

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@alia Well, you’re right, a lot of it was a copy… but for some reason they played it in a way that seemed fresh to me. Although, I will say, the characters were definitely a stronger point than the plot

I think it would have been great for Rey to turn to the dark side, too 😀

That moment when Kylo says “Let’s leave everything behind. Snoke,…[Read more]

@shannon Yep, I play guitar… more like I’m learning it right now

I can’t play super fast fingering

🙂 That’s another good idea. If I have enough time, I might try to that at some point.

@aislinn-mollisong XD XD @dekreel You’re right. That does sound like an awesome first line 😀 I wouldn’t be so sure you can’t write songs @aislinn-mollisong…[Read more]

@catwing … that would make sense. And you’re right, the laws of physics and order are completely different there, in some ways

@lady-iliara 😀 Thanks! I’m glad

@christi-eaton  I just watched the Wingfeather Saga short film last night! It was cool! I liked Peet X)

I loved he part where it was sparkling everywhere when Leeli started singing, and the fang was like blown away. That was AWESOME! So well done!

Oh yeah, I agree with @waterlily about the footnotes. HILARIOUS XD

@mariposa  Wow. That’s…. awesomeist thing… yeah, @kate-flournoy, you and me both

@dragon-snapper  Yep, that’s the one I found! For some reason I expected it to be two or three years ago, but I guess you weren’t on KP yet… How long have you been on KP?

(BTW I’m not writing. Yet…)

@aislinn-mollisong  @winter-rose  I seem to have gotten distracted looking through the archives… I’m looking for the first time @dragon-snapper has melted a chair. She says it was in Writer’s Corner #2, so I’m checking it out…

Anyway, happy writing!

@winter-rose  That’s more of an outside motivation than an inside inspiration, I suppose 🙂

Is it an article for KP?

@winter-rose  I know! So then you wouldn’t be pressured to keep writing all night! XD

@aislinn-mollisong  Yipeee! Another Kapeefer Adventure!!

I’m getting the feeling that everyone’s writing KPAs all of a sudden because they’re excited about mine, which is taking forever…  I may be totally wrong XD

@aislinn-mollisong  @winter-rose  Err… Are you guys still here?