Felicity

@savannah_grace2009

Thanks!! <33

one thing I’ll suggest, is that I feel like you don’t really introduce the family to us in the first few chapters. At first I wasn’t even sure if Blake was their sibling or not XDXD

They do have a HUGE family, so setting a solid foundation and making all the siblings and the parents unique and established in ou…

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@freed_and_redeemed

Wyoh apparently doesn’t like to notify me when you tag me 😑 Anywayyyy Loved the scene! But also feel so bad for Riker!! 😥

@the_lost-journal

Oh cool! Awesome!!

@the_lost-journal Cool! i hope she doesn’t have problems joining…..cause my brother’s application (he sent it twice on two separate occasions) is still being ignored, and on the “welcome our newest member” thing at the bottom of the forums tab, the last member that joined did so several months ago. I don’t know if they’re keeping track of that anymore.

@the_lost-journal yeah let ’em go to the dung beetles

dung beetles are funny though. The way they roll up their “treasure” and walk (sometimes backwards) pushing it around all the time

@the_lost-journal Forgive my language, but those people who do agree are steaming piles of aurochs’ dung.

@ellette-giselle Ooooh! I didn’t expect Qayid and Rolf to be the same person, but I’m happy he and Leon were reunited. I wonder what’ll happen to Albee, although I’m glad Leon and Ian weren’t separated at least.

Is Leon going to heal now that this new slave master is kinder to them and won’t make him work as hard as he did?

Also, I think this…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal you’re welcome!

And you’re good, these things happen sometimes.

Plus you now know we all agree with you on how disgusting such a thing would be lol

(not much of a laughing matter but ehh you know me)

I also liked the way Leon realizes he’s dying, and that he doesn’t have much time left to work here. The urgency that comes over his actions was real to me.

And then the whole “you’re crazy but I still kinda admire your attitude” thing was funny, but unfortunately real.

@ellette-giselle

Okay. XD

1. It directly applied to today. Ian was hopeless. Utterly hopeless. And there really wasn’t anything better than Heaven itself to offer him. Most people today are already living in hell. They need to know heaven is real.
2. We saw that suicide attempt coming, even though you didn’t spell that out. And then you thwarted a…

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@ellette-giselle

Where did you come from?!?! 😂

*Wiggles fingers mysteriously* Narnia…

I wonder what is hooking everyone so much about this section?! Why do y’all like it so much?

I guess it felt well balanced to me, better than some of the others. You did more show than tell; your characters were interacting with each other and their own st…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

It’s Rolf! XD I was expecting someone from Vandalia or somewhere like that, not Rolf.

And yeah. I actually read the chapters in my email to avoid spoiling, although it does mean I often forget to comment.

But oooooo, I liked this chapter. Definitely ready for the next one.

(And I still don’t think this book is darker than the…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal it’s okay!!

Glad it wasn’t that bad, but it’s still serious.

@the_lost-journal

No worries! That’s still serious and important and I’ll keep praying 🙏🏻🫶🏻

@godlyfantasy12 so the brothers are a little like Moses and Aaron, kinda! Cool! Emyr would be the Moses equivalent, the younger brother that leads the people according to God’s plan, and then Daryen would be the Aaron-like, the older brother fulfilling the more explicitly priestly role.

(was just reading Numbers in my morning Bible study, so t…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Leo

The elevator rattled on its assent, nearly drowning out the kid’s quiet words. Leo leaned back against the smooth metal wall an, enjoying the rythmic click of well built machinery even if it was a bit rough. His thumbs hooked into his belt.

“Ah, me too, kid. A title’d probably make it that much harder to be inconspicuous.”…[Read more]

@koshka Thank you! Yes, while I’m probably going to aim a bit in the middle of YA and Middle grade, I’m just not sure how comfortable I am at least in this drafting stage with certain issues and of course this is a CLEAN work/series, so while I will deal with heavy issues, making it more YA, and writing style as well (I hope lol!) I don’t want to…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Well done! I appreciate how you wrote that in a way that a younger audience wouldn’t understand his implications, yet you didn’t shy away from the point. And oh, Ara.

She should have told him. But that’s not an easy thing to say.

And November. Dear, loving November.

I hope this Uncle beats the snot from that kid in one way or…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle I can get behind having a gun and a shield inside the pulpit. He’s well prepared.

I don’t think my church has ever had a shooting in our area, but we still have people guarding around. I work in the pre-k Sunday school, and sometimes, if the weather’s nice, we take the kids over to the playground we have just outside the…[Read more]

and if it feels like im just bullying November I am SORRY its just cuz im writing the first scenes/first book and basically this book has a lot of rough scenes for November…this was his life…sad to say…It gets better gang! He has some good scenes with Ara!

@godlyfantasy12 wow!

so Ara’s family is all in high positions? Her parents are the rulers, her uncle is called a “prophet” so I’m guessing that means he’s their advisor?