Faith Kindred

@Daeus Well botheration but, thanks to you, after checking my e-mail I discovered my contact gadget wasn’t working. And probably hasn’t been working for quite a while for some reason. Anyway, I’ve made a contact page which I’ve tested and which does work. So sorry about that, but if I could just trouble you to resubmit your e-mail on that page…

Ok, wen’t ahead and did that. You should have my email now.

My book’s historical fiction, but it doesn’t have a large focus on the history, more the story. Its a long and complicated plot, so I won’t try to explain it now, but I personally love the plot and only hope my writing may match up to it.

*Also stalking topic because I’ve been discovering that boys (excuse me, men) think very differently from girls and quite a few of my main characters are young men…*

@kate-flournoy The book is around 75,000 words long (125 pages, give or take a little).

@Daeus I’d love if you could look my book over…especially to (hopefully) make my fight scenes realistic.
It would depend on what is going on in a year, of course, but I’d probably be able to look over a longer book. I have a book of my own which is nearly…[Read more]

Ooohhhh, well they don’t scream gasp or faint over good books!

Scream? Well, they only scream if they’re being goofy (which is quite often). They might yell a warning or yell in pain. Still, they might make a frightened yellish the thing if they are suddenly frightened.

Gasp? Most likely going to happen when they see somebody about to get…[Read more]

Only the sixth chapter of the first book! It hasn’t even started to get good yet!

Oh, and with the screaming, gasping, fainting thing, I was talking about this topic. What makes men scream, what makes them gasp, etc. Sorry— should have clarified that. 😛

I think I could manage that. Anyways, if I find I can’t, it will do no harm. And I’ll probably take you up on the beta-read exchange deal, though it won’t be for another year probably. I should warn you though, mine will be probably twice as long. If that seems unfair, you may of course temper your offer with a caveat on length, and I will oblidge.

The forth (well now it’s 6th) chapter of the first book.

As to screaming and gasping and fainting, I’m not quite sure what you refer to, unless they be suggested reaction to the demotion of Ben-Hur. If so, I am not to greatly shaken I think. Fourth is still a very noble position. I have no fear at least that any book will ever surpass my all time…[Read more]

@Daeus— the fourth chapter of the first book? Or the fourth chapter of the third book?

Oh, and how ’bout screaming? And gasping? And fainting? Just kidding about the fainting. 😛

How long is your book, Hope? Schedules constrain us to ask such beastly questions. 😛

I like botheration

And, just because I can, here is a collage I made for King’s Armor (all pictures from Pinterest).

They are quite insane as well…. and able to turn things away from ghostliness.

@david
Are you a Hornblower fan, by any chance?

No, haven’t seen it. Just finished the fourth chapter of the book though. Very good. I fear it may replace Ben-Hur.

Good points. I like that little example you did there… you’re going to make me crazy to read that book, Rosey.

Cliches of any nature should sometimes be avoided, and sometimes they should be used and flipped around when the reader isn’t expecting it. Both ways are effective. Good thoughts!

There are dialog cliches to avoid as well.
“You’ll never get away with this!” “Oh, but I already have/Watch me.”
“It’s quiet… too quiet.”
“You should sit down.”
“Well if it isn’t___”
“How is he?” “He’ll live.”
“What just happened?”
“Whatever you do, don’t look down.”
“Stay here.” “No way, I’m coming with you.”

Usually just try and find…[Read more]

Oh, and one more thing to add to this. The ‘type’ of your dialogue should fit the genre of your book. Like, Fantasy vs. Scifi, say. I’m too lazy to think up a mini-scene right now, so I’ll post a quick example from my WIP…

Egann laughed merrily. “You have not changed, at any rate,” he said. “Your tongue is still as sharp as the fangs of a wolf.…[Read more]