Faith Kindred

That made me laugh too, Amanda. 😀

Okay Daeus, now that we’ve got the premise, let’s flesh it out.

Honestly, I forgot about his best friend.
We could say he ends up fighting against Walter when Walter becomes ruthless… that could illustrate how bitter Walter has become. To flesh that out further, we could also say that the best friend has a…[Read more]

Oh goodness, Ezra. Please. 😛

@Ezra-Wilkinson— the difference between torture and punishment is this. If you commit a crime, you are dealt some painful consequence of that crime to teach you not to commit that crime again. Once you have received that punishment and paid, presumably, for your wrongdoing, you are free to go and need not face any consequence again unless you…[Read more]

Nooo, not Walter! Oh, well Walter, sometimes sad things happen.

The two things I’m wondering is why the terrorists killed his family (and if they are still out to kill him) and how his best friend fits into all this?

The next thing we need to figure out is some unusual ways to make bad heroes lovable. We know we can make them snarky brilliant…[Read more]

Inflicting severe pain to make someone do or say something is the def. We’re not talking about punishments.

Do the elf thing.

Hm… I like that. I like that. I really do. Let’s see… let’s see where I can take this…

Oh boy, I’m too tired to avoid cliches tonight.

Let’s say Walter was out on one of his long walks, and he comes back to find his home burned by terrorists and his family all presumably dead. Sufficiently tragic?

He’s not exactly the type to go off…[Read more]

Why hello little brown dog! So nice to meet you!

Oooo a ranch! How many horses do you have? And what’s the mare’s name?

Oh, this …. this will be fun.

I’m so sorry Walter. I’m really really sorry.

Walter was is 19. Ever since he was 0 he has lived in south Africa. He is semi-social, not a ton of friends, but mostly pretty good ones. He love animals and is constantly thinking about how to put all of Africa’s amazing and bizarre animals to good use. He also loves…[Read more]

How do ya do little brown dog? (well I assume)

It’s great to have you here. We’re looking forward to what you have to contribute and eager for your opinions, jokes, and writing enthusiasm.

Oops— my bad.

But isn’t that IN the forum called Novel Ideas?

Actually @howlingwolf you should post your excerpt for critique under Novels > Novel Critique.

Ooh… don’t tempt me, Daeus. I have too many characters already. 😛

That’s great though. I may just have to. Oh dear…

I just realized we did that backwards. We should have started with a charming good guy and made him villainly.

You start it this time. 😀

Welcome, Little Brown Dog! And thanks for bringing @howlingwolf along with you. 😉

Here are the basic rules of survival for the newbie on an online writing forum.

1. Learn the lingo. A few important abbreviations you need to know are as follows.
POV: Point of View.
MC: Main Character.
WIP: Work in Progress.

2. Watch out for…[Read more]

You didn’t scare me away. I just had to eat dinner. 😛

It sounds like you’ve done a good job of having this be a story element, @howlingwolf, but not promoting it. That’s perfectly fine. In fact that can actually be a very good thing, as it forces the reader to stop and think about these things. And that’s always good.

I think it’s safe to say…[Read more]

Yes, you can. Go to the forum called ‘novel ideas’ and create yourself a topic there.

Welcome! Glad to have you here.

@Littlebrowndog It’s fine you posted here first. 😉

Also, I think someone said it but I’m not sure who…a ‘good’ character could use torture without you promoting it. Perhaps he’s really angry when he uses it; or maybe he matures more later on or becomes a Christian and then he realizes it might not have been the best thing to do (assuming we…[Read more]

@howlingwolf Welcome to the forum. Why don’t you introduce yourself in the “Start Here” section.

Yeah, I think abridgment edits out some things. You get the same story, just not to its full depth. That’s unfortunate but I’m sure the abridgment was still good. You can get the full thing from the library (If the columbus system goes that far south.) If not, you might be able to have it delivered to a local public or college library through the…[Read more]