Faith Kindred

Underground and what, the roof falls in?

@Bluejay not today. Tomorrow I should have time to write.

Love this! I feel like it could be used in Vacation Bible School or something of the like 🙂 it has a really unique tone and simplicity to it that I really liked! Great job ;D

@spradlin Come and check this poem out. What do you think?

Totally got the typewriter feels the first time I read the poem! It’s a really interesting poem, and it almost has a haunting kind of rhythm to it. Good job!

Excellent! I shall go and scope it out. I’m always on board with poetry!

*blanches* raspberry!?! How can you eat those? (I can’t eat blackberries either. I do like blueberries and strawberries though.)
Thank you. Now, an illustrator….. (or not! 😛 )

@bluejay That looks great! Only two little things. First, the “about” in “About forty days later” seems to be in the way. I think the poem will flow better without it. Second, I might put an ellipsis either before or after the “And guess what they saw?”

That’s it.

Best regards,

Daeus Lamb, raspberry eater.

@Ivy-rose It’s The Final Clash.

My sister is of the opinion I should have the whole battle underground; but 50,000 soldiers? There would have to almost be an underground city for that; something which I don’t have room for in this book. Perhaps just a hundred or so on each side… But it still boils down to the two characters; the shield and the spear.

I try to tag you and get it wrong! @daeus Try that instead. 😛

OK. So I’ve been working hard on this poem. I have added some more stanzas in case it does become a book. So the targeted audience is young children. With that in mind what do you think?
I’ll tag you just so you do see it @deaus. 😀

In a land long ago,
When men were all bad,
They stole and they murdered,
Which made the Lord sad.

He said,…[Read more]

@anna-brie do you want to start with half an hour with me?

The Final Clash.

I just read the battle again and I suppose it could do with something more.

Great idea.

@hope Sorry, no amazing ideas here, but the “ancient pear that doesn’t break” made me laugh out loud.

What book is this? I don’t think I’ve read it yet…but I’m thinking I need to!!! 🙂

@overcomer
Hey, no problem! *beams* 🙂

Water spraying on the army…I suppose that’s a possibility. Though considering how close the fight it, it would logically get on soldiers of both sides; except that it would be a miraculous event already, so water landing on one soldier and not another shouldn’t be too strange. I don’t know…

@hope Could the water actually physically come to the good guy’s army? Like, could it shoot out of the earth in a huge geyser and scatter its spray all over them?