@evelyn-collins
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins ah ok, makes sense! The first one sounds like the one I’d go with.
oh and the Bing AI came up with this when I asked it do draw a character matching Leo’s description. This drawing has tattoos on both arms, not just the left one, and looks kinda more like something out of a early 2000s, somewhat cringey Disney Channel rom-com than…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins ha, we’re actually pretty close together then.
oh and question… I was reading your fanfic and came across this line:
“If she doesn’t have the force, how did you find her?” he [Rylan] asked.
“She is a special case,” Varian said distantly. “But I suppose that was plain to see.”
What did he mean by that, and how did he find her ex…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins cool! I can’t wait to see what you come up with….
also I’m from Florida, but I can’t tell u specifically where lol
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins kinda random, but are you planning to have the other members of the Bad Batch show up anywhere? Like either in flashbacks or as part of Leo and Rylan’s journey? And will they have children of their own? (Obviously Omega won’t lol, and I feel like that’s not Echo’s thing either)
(Oh, and a little tip–usually when I write…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins I’ve heard that, and yes, that theory certainly fits him.
I personally think it might, and if it doesn’t, I think just having her with the habit but not know where it came from is a great idea lol
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins lol yay!
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins oh btw I know you won’t see this till Sunday, but my dad pointed out something interesting about the tetrachromacy thing we talked about.
He said from a tactical/militaristic point of view, it would be a good advantage for Leo and Crosshair, as snipers, to have better color vision. Think of Cross trying to take out an enemy…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins all righty! See you then I guess!!
(and now you know why I have Tech as my profile pic lol. Like him, I can fill your head with useless info for hours)
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins Maybe! I’ve never thought of that, but there are studies on some people (the only ones with the trait are female, but a male could probably be introduced through genetic experimentation, which is exactly what happened) who had extra light-sensing cells in their eyes. It’s called tetrachromacy, and it’s though that those with the…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins All right!
So, Leo’s arc here–the story we’re trying to tell with her–seems that she doesn’t trust anyone, and is really aloof. Her mom’s hurt her, Varian’s not the nicest either, and she’s heard about how her dad walked out on her. Is there somewhere you’re going with that? Like, she’s going to have to trust Crosshair that…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins yeah I can see her being less powerful since she’s second-gen. But still.
Can you tell I’m really enjoying helping you brainstorm?
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins yeah I could tell lol
does that mean she’s also got superpowerful eyesight? Like, with training and a decent rifle, she could hit things from as far away as he can? (For reference, the “10 clicks” Hunter mentions when he first introduced Crosshair is ten kilometers, or about six miles. No sniper in our world has ever managed to…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins it certainly would be…
Except I’m not saying your charrie and my charrie are literally the same person. What I’m thinking of is two separate timelines, in which what would be the same character went through different situations. Something happened to Cross’s love interest in your story (idk her name here, but the charrie in my…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins I’m back. I just keep coming here to read your fanfic as it’s written lol
So, funny enough, Leo’s mom’s explanation of how she fell in love with you-know-who is pretty close to the romance story I’d contrived for him in my own fanfic universe, which is crazy (and make me wonder……are my charrie and your charrie two different…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins ok, here it is:
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins I hope so too. Hence why I have him as a cyborg on my profile, since I feel like the fall he took would at least hurt him. (I can post the picture here and larger if you want to study it.)
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins Lol I can be, but I also was just shocked that they’d kill him off so soon in the show, and after all the character development they gave him.
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins lol I didn’t even cry at Tech’s, I was just frozen, like “What…what just happened. What.”
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins lol that’s awesome
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Keilah H. replied to the topic my star wars Fanfic in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@evelyn-collins lol yeah it happens
also, great signature. Fives is the best isn’t he?
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