Karina Sanchez

Oh, cool! Thanks for sharing, @daeus.

@adry_grace

Other than just having no idea who these characters are and their back story, I think the main problem was a scattered and rushed scene structure. There’s some slowing down that needs to be done and that includes describing the details of setting, facial expressions, feel in the air, etc. I get the sense that you are skipping back…[Read more]

“Ashlynn!” a voice shouts from behind. “Watch out for-” I’m knocked unconscious before the voice can finish it’s sentence.

Maybe here you could describe how the character was knocked unconscious more…for example, you could say, “I felt something hard strike the back of my head, and everything went black.” Or something like that. 🙂

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Hm… the biggest problem to me seems to be the rushed flow of it @adry_grace. Also, the characters have zero personality. You know ’em because you’ve seen whatever it is they’re from, and it’s cool to you to have them in these situations because you know them and it’s fun to think how they would react, but I as a reader not familiar with the…[Read more]

Hm… the biggest problem to me seems to be the rushed flow of it. Also, the characters have zero personality. You know ’em because you’ve seen whatever it is they’re from, and it’s cool to you to have them in these situations because you know them and it’s fun to think how they would react, but I as a reader not familiar with the story am left…[Read more]

@rolena-hatfield, It is a lot of fun. We actually have performances for the True Story of the Three Little Pigs this week! 😀
My favorite musicals are Les Miserables and Wicked. Do you have a favorite musical/show? Ooo, Mary Poppins! That sounds like fun. 🙂

Well, maybe the test was right. I looked at it again and I can see it now. Not certain, but I think it could be. He came out as an ENTJ. …Welp…

If it a sacrificial or maybe redemptive death, trick your reader with the possibility the character might escape death or at least have them think about what life could be if they did. Focus on what they are giving up more than the death itself.

Sounds like some good stuff @hope

Depends on savings and income stream. Could be a nice thing though my guess would be that it would eventually end up on a shelf somewhere. Consider that for the same amount you get about 200 people to visit your opt-in page with the draw of a free book. Assuming the opt-in page is attractive, that might register into 100ish subscribers = worth…[Read more]

@hope Ooops! At least I didn’t tell you who it is. You are going to love Dreamlander.

Is there anyone on here who is an S instead of an N? I’m noticing a pattern there. Makes sense actually.

I finished it @writefury— lovely. *grins widely* That last line was perfect. 😉

Hahaha… guess what guys, I just found out that one of my villains is an ESTP…

… and so is an incredibly vain pygmy dragon who belongs to one of my MC’s (Arianwen, @writefury— from the ‘Inter-genre Island’ thread) as a pet.

Oh yes, Boromir, definitely. Both sacrificial and redemptive.

Come to think of it, Thorin’s death as well, @hope, though in the movie. The one in the book wasn’t all that impressive.
Thorin’s death was neither sacrificial nor redemptive, and so it was more bitter than, say, Sydney Carton’s death in A Tale of Two Cities, but it worked because he…[Read more]

The death of Boromir was one of my favorite chapters in TLOTR. I also just read Dreamlander recently and that book has perhaps the most heart-wrenching death I’ve ever read. It’s got to compete with ATOTC though, so it’s real close.

I’d say there are three main ways to do a tragic death:
1. The sacrificial death – where one character dies for…[Read more]

*huddles down and hides face in hands, whimpering and sobbing and clutching dark hair with long white fingers* I’m gonna cry.

I am so gonna cry.

*Cries dutifully, then realizes who you were referring to @writefury and starts bawling in earnest*

Yes. That death. Totally that death. It’s not just that he sacrificed his life, either— he sacrificed his reputation. See @hope, the MC had just been framed for a crime he didn’t commit and no one could prove he hadn’t committed it. So the MC’s…[Read more]