Karina Sanchez

@That_Writer_Girl_99 yep. It’s pretty awesome. Soprano?

@That_Writer_Girl_99 mmmm… yes. *digests it* I likey. Muchly. Again, let me have some time to mull over it and I have a few questions I wanna ask you about it once I get everything straight in my head, but that’s an awesome idea. Lots to go with there.

@That_Writer_Girl_99 yes ma’am I do. I absolutely love it. It’s probably my next favorite thing after writing. 🙂
And yep, Emma plays the violin… and yes I have an older sister named Elizabeth. Beautiful name. 😉

@Christi-Eaton thanks. 🙂

@That_Writer_Girl_99 fire away. 😀

If you remember a while back, I requested prayer for the Easter offertory I and my sisters were going to play/sing for our church. I don’t remember who all responded (@Daeus @Ethryndal @ClaireC possibly?) but I just wanted to let you know that everything went off really well. I was incredibly nervous but it didn’t affect my voice at all, which is…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99 *grins* Well, you’re stuck with us now. 😀 We solemnly pledge to help you with all your problems… whether you want that or not.
*goes off cackling*
*pops her head back in momentarily* 12+ years… wowsers. I’ve been seriously writing for four years and that seemed like forever… guess not.
Kudos for sticking to it so long…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99 ooooohhhhhh boyyyyyy… *grins monstrously**chuckles evilly* You have no idea what you just set in motion. I just took a whole long beautiful course that this wonderful place of Kingdom Pen put together on mastering theme and you ask me for help—!!! YESSSSSS!! Bliss!!! *closes eyes**sighs happily*

Tell you what. Give me…[Read more]

@f5a8c3e92 yes, much better. They pretty much already caught everything that needed help, I think.
Weaving the dream thing in was a great idea. Made it a lot more intriguing and set up the premise quite nicely. 😉

@That_Writer_Girl_99 um… Kara? *scrunches her eyes up* Shortish light brown hair… plain face that could be pretty if she smiled… (like most faces. 😀 ) fairly big eyes that are probably somewhere between blue and grey… almost blunt nose… probably fairly large-boned when it comes to build, but not particularly big. She looks bookish to…[Read more]

@that_writer_girl_99 Not sure exactly what you’re referring to, but I think everything I said was good. Keep at it! May the ideas be with you.

Woah woah, hold it people. I rule a separate kingdom. Josiah and I are in alliance. *looks warily at raspberries hoping they aren’t poisoned*

@dragon-snapper @jenali Signing off. I didn’t really come up with any ideas, but it should probably be tense enough. We’ll see.

@dragon-snapper @jenali Ok, now I’m back.

@dragon-snapper @jenali Ooops, sorry. I guess I have other work I need to do.

@dragon-snapper @jenali I’ll join in. I’m trying to figure out how to add another layer of conflict to my climax.

@That_Writer_Girl_99 yeah. What he said. XD

@That_Writer_Girl_99 I’ll just repeat what Kate said that the character voice is really well done. I’m especially surprised you’ve been able to get this good without anyone critiquing you. Honestly, that’s downright crazy.

It does seem that the plot needs some development though, as well as the question of what to do with the elementals.

I…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99 ooooohhhh… you know what? It looks like you’ve got really good potential here for a disillusionment story. I really, really love the idea of the world outside being even worse than the prison.
What do you know about theme/message and building your story around it?
Because if you do have the world outside be worse than the…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99 no, I know. It isn’t. 😛 Have you come up with any ideas so far? Need help brainstorming? Seriously, just dump them all right here and I’ll help you pick through them if I can. That’s what we do here. We’re all writers after all… 😉 Even if you think the ideas are dumb, please— share them. I have dumb ideas all the time.…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99

Wow.
Okay, first of all, may I just say congratulations on the very strong character voice. Most people go for the snazzy voices of characters like Tam to carry their story if it’s first person, but I love the subtle yet very distinct tone of Kara’s. It’s beautiful.

In fact, your prose itself is actually very strong, and I…[Read more]