Esther

@esther-c

Idk…I just feel like that way has much better writing and is just more emotional XD

if I’m being completely honest here… sometimes hooks are overrated…. 👀😂

lol!

@esther-c

I may answer all your questions later, but for now, I am drawn into the story.
BUT
I see potential for this story to be better if you had at least one chapter before this that introduced us to daily life with the Orb. It would drawn me in more, and make us care about Ev and Ami more than just plopping them and the plot in our laps off…[Read more]

@esther-c

Thank you so much Esther! I’ve been doubting my writing recently and really comparing myself to others, so it makes me happy you like it. I started writing in present tense as soon as I started writing, so after the initial hurdle (it was hard lol, I kept using said) it’s been pretty natural, because I don’t know how write any other…[Read more]

@esther-c nahh he’s fine lol

@whalekeeper bruh

@esther-c @smiley

Tech

This was more awkward than it should’ve been…..

Tech averted their gazes, focusing on the weird fish fritter, and barely noticed when they got up to leave.

He did follow them out to say goodbye, however, and came across a dance class, a group of characters all inside, apparently having fun.

He…[Read more]

@acancello @grcr @hybridlore @esther-c

I’ve been praying about this today…and I just got a strong sense that God wants me to keep the beginning like I had it…like the second link.

I just feel a lot better about the way I had it before. I’m not sure why…I just get anxiety every time I think about starting it that way, and feel immediate…[Read more]

@esther-c Yeah, Liv has blue eyes. She also has blue skin and hair XD

Livia

She heard Fynn say “Aww”, and it was clear who he was talking about. Liv wanted to smack him upside the head.

“He is so annoying,” she rolled her eyes.

“Tell me about it,” Lukas muttered under his breath.

Liv’s stomach came alive with butterflies as they danced…[Read more]

@esther-c

About prologues…I’ve never heard that before! Mine is technically a first chapter, so should I just erase the label of “prologue”?? 😂

you’re good!!! You can just read it over on these links. I posted earlier in this thread, or I can send you the Google docs link so you can comment and edit. I can’t send the docs link now because I’m…[Read more]

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom @highscribeofaetherium @rae @vinagirl @trailblazer @grcr @esther-c @whalekeeper @mineralizedwritings @keilah-h @acancello @hybridlore @anyone-else

Okay, guys. I need serious help. My novel is kind of going nowhere…because I don’t know which way to start it!!!

I have two beginnings for my story. One jumps straight into…[Read more]

@esther-c

Livia

She stood there for a moment. “Um…I’m not sure how to do this.”

“Yeah, me neither,” Lukas laughed a little, “I was kind of hoping you would know.”

“Well, I don’t.”

“Oh.”

“We should watch the other people, and maybe we’ll figure it out?” Liv raised an eyebrow, and Lukas nodded.

They studied Fynn and Callista for a good…[Read more]

@esther-c

Hey, my little sister’s name is Hallie!! XD

@esther-c

Lol

@esther-c

🤣😭 Too true

@esther-c

Okay if Easton isn’t taken then I could see him being a good match for Falon when Ev goes back to Ami

@esther-c Hey! Sorry I meant to respond to this when I saw it, but I got distracted with other stuff xD.

The first ones probably my favorite. The second one feels a little abrupt… almost, if that makes sense. But I think they both work!

@mineralizedwritings @esther-c

Thanks guys, it really helps me to know that I can talk to you guys <333

@esther-c @whalekeeper

Aww thanks guys!! that’s so sweet, and I do feel like I’ve improved

also Esther I’m totally up for someone new for Falon (you know when Ev realizes he loves Ami and needs to tell her)

The same thing happens with Michael and Jade (they’re close friends but there’s an age gap between them and they don’t realize their…[Read more]

@rae

Cool with me! I just thought it would be nice to RP the dance with someone else’s charrie as a partner. If Hugo and Nar practice together tonight, he’d probably ask her 😉

@esther-c

If you were planning to start the lessons, that’s great, go ahead 😝 Thank you!

@smiley

I agree with Esther – you’ve definitely gotten better at writing…[Read more]