Ellie Wingfeather

@trailblazer

Okay, I just couldn’t remember if they were courting or not. It’s been a while since I’ve read this XD

I kinda want Chester to change his mind and court Libbie, but it would also really hurt Etta and would cause more drama so I don’t at the same time. lol!

@trailblazer

Wait, so is Etta and Chester dating? I can’t remember XD

And I love it!!! It’s so perfect <333

@grcr

Thanks for understanding!! I kind of am still a little worried that nobody will like it the other way XD but I’m happy that I got an answer from God and that makes me feel a lot more confident.

Idk why but I just feel bad for Etta XD

@trailblazer

Awww poor Etta!

@acancello @grcr @hybridlore @esther-c

I’ve been praying about this today…and I just got a strong sense that God wants me to keep the beginning like I had it…like the second link.

I just feel a lot better about the way I had it before. I’m not sure why…I just get anxiety every time I think about starting it that way, and feel immediate…[Read more]

@trailblazer

WHY DO I KEEP SPELLING YOUR TAG WRONG?!?!?!

@traiblazer

Well hurry up and post/write it so I can read it!!!!!!!! XD NOW I’M CURIOUS!!!!! lol!

@esther-c Yeah, Liv has blue eyes. She also has blue skin and hair XD

Livia

She heard Fynn say “Aww”, and it was clear who he was talking about. Liv wanted to smack him upside the head.

“He is so annoying,” she rolled her eyes.

“Tell me about it,” Lukas muttered under his breath.

Liv’s stomach came alive with butterflies as they danced…[Read more]

@esther-c

About prologues…I’ve never heard that before! Mine is technically a first chapter, so should I just erase the label of “prologue”?? 😂

you’re good!!! You can just read it over on these links. I posted earlier in this thread, or I can send you the Google docs link so you can comment and edit. I can’t send the docs link now because I’m…[Read more]

@grcr

Ah, don’t worry, I always enjoy reading the works of other writers!! 😉😊

Aww thanks!

@hybridlore

Sorry, I think my last post lagged.

It’s all Wyoh’s fault…..XD

I really like your idea of doing the flashback and then going to Lilitu’s pov, though!

Okay, great! i’ll think and pray about it, but I’m pretty sure that this fits better than how I had it originally.

@savannah_grace2009

Of course! Sorry, I think my last post lagged. I really like your idea of doing the flashback and then going to Lilitu’s pov, though!

@acancello @hybridlore @grcr

You guys, thank you so much for reading it and for everything!! I was kinda scared for some reason that nobody would be interested to even look at it!

 The first one does pull me in better and I want to read more, but I just love the description and feel of the second, however, it may be a bit slow for the beginning…

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@grcr @savannah_grace2009

Yeah, I did notice that! Maybe Lilitu’s chapter could come after Sef’s?

@sara

Definitely! I hope you figure it out!

@grcr

Ohh! I never thought of that before!!!

That makes a lot of sense, actually.

Maybe I could go something like this:

1. Prologue

2. Memory (chapter 15 of the second link, shows Sef and Neveah picking flowers with Hanna)

3. Nothing (go to Lilitu and Livia)

4. Stolen (where Sef and Neveah get seperated)

@hybridlore

I will definitely think about all this! I need to get more opinions before I make a decision…I am just so new to all this and want to see what more people think.

It’s a neat idea with the time change or whatever, I just don’t want it to be too confusing, and/or abrupt, you know?

@acancello

Awww your dedication and acknowledgement…

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@savannah_grace2009

Hey! I think the first one does a great job of pulling the reader in more, but the second one also has some great writing in it.

I know the chapter with Sef and her mom really means a lot to you, and it does a good job of setting up the backstory of Sef’s parents and a little bit of world building. So really they both work in…[Read more]

@acancello

I have skimmed through these pages here and read pieces of your WIP and I have to say… I love them! Your really good at describing the way things look and feel.

Wait…really???!?!?! Aww thanks that means so much to me!!! I am excited for your feedback!! AND I CAN’T WAIT FOR MORE HUGO!!! lol

Also, feel free to tag you in any post w…

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@jonas @thearcaneaxiom @highscribeofaetherium @rae @vinagirl @trailblazer @grcr @esther-c @whalekeeper @mineralizedwritings @keilah-h @acancello @hybridlore @anyone-else

Okay, guys. I need serious help. My novel is kind of going nowhere…because I don’t know which way to start it!!!

I have two beginnings for my story. One jumps straight into…[Read more]