Ellie Wingfeather

@esther-c

Sorry I’m just now getting to this!!!!

My main critique would be that you spend a lot of time on dialogue. I kind of feel like we just got thrown into the story and all we know about the characters is because of what they say. Maybe breaking up some dialogue and really showing us who they characters are would help…it kind of feels l…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Poor Highscribe. What did you do to her?

@ellette-giselle

Leon is definitely more confident and the leader. It feels like Julian looks to him and gets more concerned about things. And Julian likes to make quips. That was just what I think I noticed from this chapter.

@ellette-giselle

He’s my favorite so I want him to die.

No wonder you kill off so many characters. 😅

🖋️Official KP Psychopath✒️

Lolol

@ellette-giselle

Good section!

Roland, I in no way want to go against God’s will, but are you sure?” Leon asked.

Roland nodded.

When I read this, I thought that maybe Leon and Julian should have prayed about it before letting him come with them.

Roland shook his head in disgust. “I have a mind to smash it,” he muttered.

“Whoa, whoa, whoa,” Le…

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@ellette-giselle

That’s not his only chapter, just the next one when he appears… I think.

He also needs to die.

That sounds contradictory, lol.

@ellette-giselle

Thanks!! I’m glad it’s working, I honestly don’t even know what I did lol. Warrain is based a lot on Overwatch, which I’ve played a lot before, so maybe it’s coming from experience and that’s how. (It’s still a very different game though.)

I sure like Cole.

When’s Alec coming back? he was my favorite!! *puppy whimper*

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@elishavet-pidyon Umm… I think I just tried to tag you by your CWW name…? 😅

@whalekeeper

Great topic!

I don’t know, I’m sure they affect my writing a lot more than I realize. The one that has the most is obviously reading but I don’t know if that counts. XD

A lot of my projects for a while had something to do with space and flying starships, because I read Skyward by Brandon Sanderson and loved it. I guess that’s an…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

tbh, I am also confused about the teachings  XD And I do wonder why. But also I get this feeling of fullness after going to confession. So whatever it is, I think I am going to stick to it! Also  thanks for the prayers. I won’t be able to get back to anyone for a while btw. I AM GOING SKIING! ^o^

I agree, it does help to tell oth…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

okay hahahaha sounds good lol

@whalekeeper

no I haven’t!!!

Doesn’t everyone have at least a fragment of virtue though? (Sorry, I don’t mean to shut down everything you’re saying, this is just my thoughts. 😅) I’m not saying they have to be someone that the readers will look up to and be like, “Oh my word I want to be just like them.” I understand mankind is sinful and there probably are people out there t…

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@esther-c

Now, you mentioned your characters not knowing God. And I liked how you put that—“without God there is no hope.” But…you have to think that these characters are probably looking for hope, right? Even just an occasional thought of wishing there was a way out of this darkness they’re living in.

So I know with where they’re at right now,…

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@savannah_grace2009 ^^

@theshadow @keilah-h @theducktator @linus-smallprint @ellette-giselle @savannah-grace2009

Chapter 11! I’m not totally decided if I’ll completely reduce down to one a week in the future, so you may get a few surprise double chapters, but this week there’s only one.

Also, TCoH has become my longest project at just over 33k words and about 100 W…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Yay for spring and positive temperatures! But I’m sure somewhere in Canada there’s still snow on the ground. 😉

Outlining, fun. Or not fun. I hope it goes well.

@esther-c

I also hope I didn’t come across as rude or brushing you off…I really do appreciate your thoughts because that means I need to work on foreshadowing! And explaining my book to others helps me flesh out my thoughts a little more! Thank you so much! <3

@esther-c

Ok, so the biggest thing I noticed was the lack of hope throughout the story. The characters seemed to think about death a lot and were put through a lot of physical pain. There’s nothing inherently wrong with that, but it needs to be balanced out with hope. When I got to read those Lilitu/Sef memories from when they were little, that w…

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@ellette-giselle

That makes sense! Jsyk, you don’t have to participate in everything, but they do offer a lot of different challenges and things for people who can do them. I didn’t even make my goal last time (embarrassingly so xD) because of school and homework. But I still had a ton of fun! It’s okay if you can’t do it, though. I underst…[Read more]