Ellie Wingfeather

@thearcaneaxiom

I like it! Thing is my favorite, lol. I don’t think you should change the name even though it’s a little mean, but it’s up to you. I think it fits her and she likes it, so it works.

The plot is a little confusing to me… a lot of the philosophy/science stuff goes over my head but that’s fine, lol. Anyway, nice job so far! I…[Read more]

@rae

Okay, phew! Finally caught up. And yeah, Chapter 7 isn’t showing up for me… so I guess I’m not, lol.

The biggest things I noticed were again, really long paragraphs. I think it would be easier to read if you split them up, but it’s up to you.

And long sections of dialogue without tags, like this:

“You can…”

“Read, write, and speak i…

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@jonas

Okay, I actually don’t think I’ll join… Thanks, though!

@grcr

I love Flaz! His personality is just…awesome!

@euodia-vision

Thank you!!

@trailblazer

I’ll check out your past posts and try to come up with some ideas!

@acancello

Thank you! <3

@savannah_grace2009

If that is what happened, I bet she’ll try to rejoin… but I guess we’ll see.

@grcr

No, that’s fine!

@acancello @mineralizedwritings @trailblazer @rae @esther-c

Ottoline

Safe.

Ottoline never thought that she would use that word to describe her current state of being, but here she was.

Hugo held her close to his side as they watched the stars through the window. It was peaceful. She couldn’t believe that a mere 24 h…[Read more]

@jonas

Got it!

 I was under the impression that this entire house was about to be transported into another dimension. Do you mean that you’ll start building to that but you won’t just immediately jump to it?

I’m not exactly sure, XD I’m working on the next RP when they get transported to the other dimension, so yeah you were right.

@jonas

I think we’ll keep it in this RP, but slowly make the transition to what Rae said, if that makes sense. Do you want us to start tagging you when we post our RP’s?

@hybridlore

Yeah that’s what i was thinking too! That’s too bad, I bet she’s disappointed (if that’s the reason). I’m gonna miss her!

@savannah_grace2009 @janellebelovedpig
Do you guys think it was an accident? Just really weird, she didn’t say anything about it. And she seemed like she was posting more often, too :/

@acancello @mineralizedwritings @trailblazer @grcr @rae @esther-c

Do you guys want me to make them all transfer to the other world Rae was talking about?

Or does someone else want to? I’m fine with either XD

@acancello

then pulled Ottoline close to him and together they watched the stars inch across the sky.

That is so good!!!

@esther-c

Wow, that’s so cool!

I wish I could come up with plot twists like that XD

@thearcaneaxiom

I like it! She reminds me of EVE from the movie WALL-E, lol

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom

That is the way of writers🤣 Your characters feel real to you. Frank Herbert’s son felt like he had to compete with his father’s characters for love and attention, so it is a very real thing that influences our world. (Sorry if I just made that a little depressing at the end, his son happily continues his father’s legac…

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@janellebelovedpig

I miss her already

@trailblazer

Wow, your posts are great! I only read one but you’re very talented!!

@jonas

You might not care, but I try to maintain a fairly equal ratio of male MCs to female MCs in a book. This shouldn’t be the deciding factor, but consider that adding Liv as a MC would give you a 2 to 4 ratio (double the amount of female characters to male), whereas you currently have as even a ratio as possible with 2 to 3.

Obviously, you m…

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