@ellette-giselle
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whaley replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 month, 3 weeks ago
I will NEVER start a book without a specific goal in mind. I had the end before I had the beginning. There is a certain amount of graphing that I do before every story, and you can be sure that all things will tie into the end of this book, or the plot of the next. I most certainly did outline my book. I’m sorry if you can’t see…
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Sara replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 month, 3 weeks ago
HOW DO YOU DO THAT?!??!?!
Wow it’s like you can read my mind lol!
Anyways….
I totally agree with what Whaley said.
The time jumps just take away so much from the story (even at the beginning where Aaron and Turin were working together) and it makes me lose interest. You do great at describing outside of the…[Read more]
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whaley replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 month, 3 weeks ago
@savannah_grace2009 @ellette-giselle
I can try XD
I think the focus needs to be waaay deeper. The writing is very much outside the characters’ perspective, and only tells the bare points of the story. So the orphanage endeavor feels random.
To compare it to something, the perspective is like a bird high in the sky. Everything below looks like doll…[Read more] -
Sara replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 month, 3 weeks ago
Just popping in because I’m bored, lol!
I kinda agree with Whaley. The story just doesn’t seem like it’s going towards a specific goal…like the events seem a bit random and idk how to describe it but it’s like your story’s missing something but it frustrates me because I don’t know what exactly I’m missing, just that something…[Read more]
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whaley replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 month, 3 weeks ago
I’ve already written the whole book.
Oh cool, this is a plenty-of-work-already-done thing.
why do you ask?
I was asking because I’m not sure what direction the story is taking. What should the reader hope to happen next? Both in Aaron’s arc and in the outward plot? – A sense of where this all leads. Because the orphanage plot w…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 month, 3 weeks ago
@ellette-giselle FIFTH draft? Wow!!
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whaley replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 month, 3 weeks ago
Are you using a normal arc structure/your own structure based off what you know about arcs? Or just thinking through the arc as you write?
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whaley replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 month, 3 weeks ago
Have you outlined LTBL?
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 month, 3 weeks ago
I just read the last section. I don’t have too much to say about it, but it was good!
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 3 weeks ago
Because, your country seems to have a little superstition what with the wizards and all that. In the olden days, (which your book is fantasy so i can’t quite tell the era) People were really cruel to lefties because they believed it was a sign of demonic inhabitants or the practice of witchcraft.
Hmm. I don’t think the citizens o…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 3 weeks ago
@ellette-giselle haha yeah
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 3 weeks ago
@ellette-giselle wow that’s… still terrible
Kinda interesting though how all of these unrelated cultures (Latin, German, Chinese, etc) all equated “left” with “wrong” separately, unless it came about once those cultures all had contact.
Don’t worry, I didn’t think you believed that nonsense lol
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Keilah H. replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 month, 3 weeks ago
@ellette-giselle very cool!!
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Quote Archive in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 3 weeks ago
@ellette-giselle MARVEL QUOTES!!!
haha they have some great ones
@freed_and_redeemed and @smiley will certainly enjoy it too
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Keilah H. replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 month, 3 weeks ago
@ellette-giselle ooh things are going in a new direction! So Aaron and his friends are taking in all the children whose parents were killed in the war?
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 3 weeks ago
@ellette-giselle Why would someone do such a thing??? Chop off a kid’s hand just cause they’re left-handed?
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 3 weeks ago
@linus-smallprint I know, right? Society goes on and on about “inclusion” nonsense, and all the while ignore the people who really should be included.
In video games, especially first-person ones such as shooters or Minecraft-type, I can kinda understand because most people are right-handed and thus game makers design their characters to be…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic Art Challenge! in the forum Art 1 month, 3 weeks ago
Nope. You did tag me. The notification just got lost and never made it to my inbox somehow.
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 month, 3 weeks ago
Here is something from a document I found helpful for coming up with blurbs.
Five-Sentence Story
1.     The balance: the normal world. What is normal? Who is our hero? What does he normally do? Suzy walks down the street with her dog.
2.    The unbalance: something happens that upsets the normal world. It must be an event…
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 3 weeks ago
Okay, I did not end up going today.
OH MY GOODNESS!! I love the picture! I think that’s your best one yet!!! – Ellette
wow great picture!!! – Keilah
Thanks! That is my most recent TNPT drawing.
Oh goodness. I dislike germaphobic guys. 😛
Oh. *Goes to wash hands for 45th time today – Reason: touched the ‘W’ key for t…[Read more]
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