Ellette Giselle

@jonas

Wow…this is a lot to think about and really helpful! Thank you!!

I don’t think there’s anything wrong with it as it is, it really evokes a certain mood, and has really strong imagery.

Okay good XD

Yeah, the first line of the book is always the hardest because that’s how the readers decide whether or not to keep reading!

These three par…

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Update
I’M DONE!!!!!!
It’s not exact, but I am proud to announce I finished around 12 hours of writing! I wrote somewhere around 9000 words, but after going through and editing sections, I was left with only about 8700 words of progress. Not as far as I hoped, but that’s still about nine days of work for me in one day!

I’m thinking about making…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

are you threatening my character? Isn’t Ignatius just a nice soldier boy who really wants to help Marcus?

Yes I’m threatening him XD. He’s still a praetorian, so I’m not going to trust him completely. I don’t know, the way he responded to Julius’ answers sounded like he was suspicious of Marcus…. Then again, maybe he is just a nic…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

The last scene was sooo cute, I liked it a lot! Also Julius’ internal dialogue and conflict was good. Ignatius, if you lay a finger on Marcus, it’s not ending well for you!

One thing that I think you could add is more description of the places though, such as when Julius and Ignatius are talking.

@ellette-giselle

Alright, and I feel you on that, I have way too many side characters that I have yet to develop lol.

@ellette-giselle

Hey, quit jumping ahead here! lol. would it interest you to know that Julius and a Praetorian may or may not be having a little conversation right now?

Haha okay I’ll be quiet and let them have their discussion XD

@ellette-giselle

I agree with @theshadow, I would love to see more of how Marcus and Flavia’s relationship develops rather than just being told that it did. I also feel like I don’t know Flavia very well- I know you describe her when Marcus is thinking about her and talking to Caius, but I want to see it in her rather than just be told it about…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Alright, a few critiques on chapter 7. I think you could show Flavia and Marcus’ relationship a bit more since we haven’t seen a lot of her.

Marcus could probably be shown to be more upset after talking with Julius, since that was his best friend.

Otherwise it was good, the ending of the chapter made me smile.

@ellette-giselle

I finished the chapter, and THAT’S SO CUTE!! Marcus totally deserves that happiness!!! I do have a few critiques, so is it okay if I could give you them on your WIP topic?

@ellette-giselle

Yay, I’m glad!! And so far, the 7th chapter is great!!

@ellette-giselle

Aaa! I’m reading it right now, I’m so excited!!

@ellette-giselle

Poor Marcus XD

@ellette-giselle

Oh, okay! That’s really considerate of you, thanks! Is editing going well?

@ellette-giselle

Yes, should I not?

My bad, I might have made it sound like that was a negative thing. I’m glad your working on it, I like it a lot! In fact, that was why I was asking, to see if you were going to post a new chapter soon or something. Sorry if that came off as rude.

@rae

I’m glad it’s going well for you, and I wish I had pulled myself out of bed at 4:00 but unfortunately was unable to (sorry!). Keep going, you got this!!

@ellette-giselle

Are you working on the Roman book perchance? 🙂

@ellette-giselle

Thank you so much!!! haha, I’m glad you liked that.

Your welcome!

Most times I write funny things and then wait in anticipation for the reader rto laugh. They look at me and are like “what? what am I supposed to laugh about?”

That’s the worst, I can definitely relate to that XD

@ellette-giselle LOL

@ellette-giselle

You can post it now. I judge it the day after the date we set, that’s all.

Can’t wait to see what you drew!