Ellette Giselle

@ellette-giselle

why Nico left, where is the baby from the prologue, who are the two different groups here. I know you have hinted at it a little in the prologue, but I’d still like more back story and more info. I tend to be a little more like Tolkine in writing, as in, I have a backstory for everyone, and most of the time, %60 percent of the b…

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@ellette-giselle

Is that bad that Thaddeus seems mature, but then there are also glimpses of him being childish, or do I need to go with one or the other? Also, are there particular times when what he says seems overly mature?

I don’t think it’s bad to show maturity and then have him resume normal childhood behavior. It just seemed like he was…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Looks like I’m a bit behind, chapter 4 was good and any critiques I had of it Savannah and Trailblazer mentioned (you guys are great at critiquing btw). I will read over chapter 5 soon, probably once I get home from a trip.

Sorry, guys, our internet was out for a while cuz of a storm.

@highscribeofaetherium

Uh…stars, that’s weirdly stated. Sorry, it basically means the triangle scale is at an angle.

@ellette-giselle

Yeah. He may or may not have a slightly longer torso than average. Since I haven’t made that official yet, I omitted it from description.

@ellette-giselle

Just a few quick notes-

-Thaddeus is ten, but sometimes he seems older (which is fine for him to be mature for his age, but sometimes it sounded like an adult talking) and sometimes he seems younger (when he is sleeping with his head in Flavia’s lap).

-A couple times when Caius is sharing the Gospel, he used more than one name…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Thanks for the offer, I’ll probably put in a character once I get home this weekend.

@ellette-giselle

Oh, awesome! I would love to have a character drawn 🙂 It might take me a bit to decide which one, though.

@ellette-giselle

I do have one question.

What is the plot of your story (feel free to share spoilers, I don’t mind)?

How long is your novel going to be?

@ellette-giselle

Yes, I do!  (I have about 36K words) However, I’m in the middle of a big  revision, so the chapters won’t really make sense. Though I do have the next chapter that I *think* should be done.

Chapter 1

Strong hands grabbed her shoulders, trying to rip her away.

But Sef wouldn’t let go.

Eyes scrunched shut, tears leaking fro…[Read more]

Hi @ellette-giselle,

I don’t know if you would be interested, but we have some challenges going on right now where you sketch a character based on a description provided getting as close to what the author imagined as possible. It is just for fun, with the rewards being writing and drawing experience. We just wrapped one up for my character,…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, maybe take Puddleglum *clears throat* I mean, that other writing coach, with a grain of salt. Scratch that, maybe a pillar of salt. lol.

🤣

 However, I will say that there is something to be learned from everyone. So, try to see the gold in the sand on what he’s saying. It might be something about dialogue, or description, or…

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@ellette-giselle

I don’t have time right now to look through all your new stuff, but I will get to it eventually!

@ellette-giselle

Oh I love what you did in the example. Perfect. I get so caught up in making sure the info that is needed is there, that I think I lost a little depth with the story. Whoops. I haven’t ever done Historical fiction before, so I’m a little stressed about keeping things accurate to history. I am surrounded by books on Rome , rom…

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@highscribeofaetherium @ellette-giselle

Yeah…oops!

I fixed that in the platform I write on (it’s called Reedsy), thank you for catching that!

@ellette

The reason that I accidently changed that to Selena is because I changed that section a LOT. I just came up with the idea to have their names be changed recently, because when you turn to…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Do you have any thoughts on the Prologue?

A little background information…

this is an allegory of spiritual warfare and the lies that we believe about ourselves, and how that affects our lives.

I’m not going to info dump everything right now cuz that would be a LOT! But I will answer any questions as you have them!

@ellette-giselle

I know you’re probably busy…but would you like to help me and give me some tips on some of my writing as well?? We could be critique partners, if you’re up for that!

@trailblazer

Girl your suggestions were good, though! I haven’t done much research on starting off a book, so it sounds like you have more tools under your belt in that area than I do.

Thank you! That’s good, I guess…xD

@ellette-giselle

I still think you should keep the fountain scene! I loved that! Just maybe put it after the Colosseum? M…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I do think the second chapter was a little smoother than the first! The only thing that raised questions for me was Marcus questioning Ignatius. I think you did cause Ignatius to be a bit suspicious that Marcus was sympathizing with the Christians, but I feel like all the questions he was asking would raise a little more alarm,…[Read more]

@rae @savannah_grace2009 I feel attacked😂 jkjk. But seriously, the final Hans scene in Freedom’s Fire does break my heart🫠

@ellette-giselle Yessss, we shall get along perfectly😂💖💖

@ellette-giselle

No way!! I did not do that twice in a row! So sorry! haha! I normally catch that when I read back through it. thanks for pointing it out.

Of course! I have done that too when I can’t think of any other words to substitute for said, XD.

Oh, I’m glad the thing about Ignatius makes sense! No worries about not remembering!

Oh ok tha…[Read more]