Ellette Giselle

I can never get your tag right apparently 🤦🏻‍♀️

@ellette-giselle

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@ellette-giselle

Keep an eye out, I’m about to post the next chapter.

Yesss!!

@ellette-giselle

Now someone is starting to get tangled in the is-he-is-he-not? phase. Love it!!

I can’t make up my mind about Ignatius XD

@ellette-Giselle

So there’s this unwritten rule on KP about joining new topics, and it basically goes like this, “Pop in wherever you want”. If you want to join the conversation, you just do. If you feel bad about it, don’t, because everyone does it too.

I understand the feeling, like you’re barging into a stranger’s house when you’re new here,…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Thank you for sending him! I love drawing for people!

Of course, thanks so much for drawing him! Also, somehow I forgot to mention this, but he’s a knight.

@theshadow

So…I think it’s a really good idea. I mean, this is a dark world, although it’s not as dark as the world you might be writing about. But it’s still riddled with sin. I think that writing a book around horrible topics might just allow the goodness of God to shine through even more strongly–just like how a light is brighter in a dark…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Ooh that’s really good advice, I’ll keep it in mind, thanks!!

@ellette-giselle

Okay, sorry this took so long, but here’s the character I finally decided on:

Name: Eldred

Age: 21

Gender: male

Clothing: medieval tunic and leggings accustom to knights, as well as a cross that hangs around his neck

Time period (Or the time period the fashion replicates): medieval era

Physical appearance: tall, muscular, j…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

@ellette-giselle

Note: There is no description in this one of the courtyard because the description would be in the chapter before.

Okay, that makes sense!

Chapter 9 was good, I like the contrast of Julius’ superstition and Marcus’ faith.

He looked at Ignatius closely. There was something in his tone…

Okay, but this makes me think Ignatius is tr…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Wow, that was really good! I like what you said about the light shining in the darkness. Thanks!

@whalekeeper

I guess I never thought about it that way. Tbh, the only reason the post apocalyptic world exists is because of the main character (he didn’t cause it, but you’ll see why in a second). The main character is supposed to…[Read more]

@jonas

Wow…this is a lot to think about and really helpful! Thank you!!

I don’t think there’s anything wrong with it as it is, it really evokes a certain mood, and has really strong imagery.

Okay good XD

Yeah, the first line of the book is always the hardest because that’s how the readers decide whether or not to keep reading!

These three par…

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Update
I’M DONE!!!!!!
It’s not exact, but I am proud to announce I finished around 12 hours of writing! I wrote somewhere around 9000 words, but after going through and editing sections, I was left with only about 8700 words of progress. Not as far as I hoped, but that’s still about nine days of work for me in one day!

I’m thinking about making…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

are you threatening my character? Isn’t Ignatius just a nice soldier boy who really wants to help Marcus?

Yes I’m threatening him XD. He’s still a praetorian, so I’m not going to trust him completely. I don’t know, the way he responded to Julius’ answers sounded like he was suspicious of Marcus…. Then again, maybe he is just a nic…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

The last scene was sooo cute, I liked it a lot! Also Julius’ internal dialogue and conflict was good. Ignatius, if you lay a finger on Marcus, it’s not ending well for you!

One thing that I think you could add is more description of the places though, such as when Julius and Ignatius are talking.

@ellette-giselle

Alright, and I feel you on that, I have way too many side characters that I have yet to develop lol.

@ellette-giselle

Hey, quit jumping ahead here! lol. would it interest you to know that Julius and a Praetorian may or may not be having a little conversation right now?

Haha okay I’ll be quiet and let them have their discussion XD

@ellette-giselle

I agree with @theshadow, I would love to see more of how Marcus and Flavia’s relationship develops rather than just being told that it did. I also feel like I don’t know Flavia very well- I know you describe her when Marcus is thinking about her and talking to Caius, but I want to see it in her rather than just be told it about…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Alright, a few critiques on chapter 7. I think you could show Flavia and Marcus’ relationship a bit more since we haven’t seen a lot of her.

Marcus could probably be shown to be more upset after talking with Julius, since that was his best friend.

Otherwise it was good, the ending of the chapter made me smile.