Ellette Giselle

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Alright, and I feel you on that, I have way too many side characters that I have yet to develop lol.

@ellette-giselle

Hey, quit jumping ahead here! lol. would it interest you to know that Julius and a Praetorian may or may not be having a little conversation right now?

Haha okay I’ll be quiet and let them have their discussion XD

@ellette-giselle

I agree with @theshadow, I would love to see more of how Marcus and Flavia’s relationship develops rather than just being told that it did. I also feel like I don’t know Flavia very well- I know you describe her when Marcus is thinking about her and talking to Caius, but I want to see it in her rather than just be told it about…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Alright, a few critiques on chapter 7. I think you could show Flavia and Marcus’ relationship a bit more since we haven’t seen a lot of her.

Marcus could probably be shown to be more upset after talking with Julius, since that was his best friend.

Otherwise it was good, the ending of the chapter made me smile.

@ellette-giselle

I finished the chapter, and THAT’S SO CUTE!! Marcus totally deserves that happiness!!! I do have a few critiques, so is it okay if I could give you them on your WIP topic?

@ellette-giselle

Yay, I’m glad!! And so far, the 7th chapter is great!!

@ellette-giselle

Aaa! I’m reading it right now, I’m so excited!!

@ellette-giselle

Poor Marcus XD

@ellette-giselle

Oh, okay! That’s really considerate of you, thanks! Is editing going well?

@ellette-giselle

Yes, should I not?

My bad, I might have made it sound like that was a negative thing. I’m glad your working on it, I like it a lot! In fact, that was why I was asking, to see if you were going to post a new chapter soon or something. Sorry if that came off as rude.

@rae

I’m glad it’s going well for you, and I wish I had pulled myself out of bed at 4:00 but unfortunately was unable to (sorry!). Keep going, you got this!!

@ellette-giselle

Are you working on the Roman book perchance? 🙂

@ellette-giselle

Thank you so much!!! haha, I’m glad you liked that.

Your welcome!

Most times I write funny things and then wait in anticipation for the reader rto laugh. They look at me and are like “what? what am I supposed to laugh about?”

That’s the worst, I can definitely relate to that XD

@ellette-giselle LOL

@ellette-giselle

You can post it now. I judge it the day after the date we set, that’s all.

Can’t wait to see what you drew!

@ellette-giselle

Do you know how long your novel is supposed to be?? Like is it a novella or a full length novel?

@ellette-giselle

“I don’t think so. Apparently, I’m still here,” replied Marcus, dryly.

I love this 😂

Okay, chapter 4, 5, and 6 were all good, although I think there could be some more body language (such as in chapter 6).

Also, in chapter 6, you could have Julius have his thoughts of grief conflicting with his angry thoughts, his angry thought…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Thank you so much <3

@ellette-giselle

Ohhh okay that makes sense. I thought you meant that you had nothing written out XD

I did that too, with bullet points, it works lol

Can you share the plot with me then? It would really help me lol

@ellette-giselle

I love how you introduced Cassian’s character. I mean, man, I liked him from the firs paragraph.

Oops…I was going to quote you but forgot….lol

I would like to know more about the Paynes as well. Like, why are they outcast, what is the race mixing thing, etc. etc. If that gets explained later then you can just leave it and l…

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