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whaley replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
Yeah, you can join if the others are good with it!!
You just killed me, I almost spit out my lunch 🤣😭 He just YEETED himself out of that bus like there’s no tomorrow
Barnes
Rory leapt up, and before anyone could stop him, he barreled out of the bus. He glanced back at Barnes before hurriedly r…[Read more]
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Elishavet Elroi replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
@koshka @whalekeeper @ellette-giselle
I’ll have to check, but I think Reúven is 16… Don’t be fooled by his cadet uniform. XD
Liora (+intro)
The bus slid to a stop with a loud exhalation from the brakes. The doors swooshed open. For a moment, no one entered, then a heeled shoe was heard on the step. A young woman in a red wool coat slid into…[Read more]
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
Oh boy indeed.
Leo
He knew a second before Quincy landed in his lap that something was about to blow.
The kid was about to bolt. And he had no idea where he was going.
Leo should have kept hold on his arm.
Then Rory was rapidly vanishing down the lorry, leaving Leo with a five year old, his little sister in a bloodstained…[Read more]
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
Leo
His gaze flickered to the woman, then to Rory, the gears in his head spinning in a blur. He moved.
But not to run and jump from the bus. His hand shot out to lock on Rory’s arm and anchor the kid in place.
“She’s not an Agent.” But not necessarily a friend, despite her soft words. Just the fact that she knew…[Read more]
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whaley replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
Barnes
“Sh, not here.” She noticed the boy’s wide, unnerved gaze. She sighed and held out her school identification card. “I only look scary to ward off the real bad guys.”
The bus screeched to a stop, and the passengers shifted and headed on and off. The little group had an excuse to slip away. Barnes turned to Leo. “…[Read more]
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whaley replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
Lol. I have a world-class master watching my every move (I still can’t believe it sometimes), and you better bet he pushes everyone on the mat.
Barnes
Standing behind the children’s bench, holding onto one of the bus poles, Barnes shielded her masked face with a cough as Leo looked around. She didn’t want to start…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
Yeah, but all I could think about was the last couple of scenes while I was making it. I guess that kinda affected the way it came across.
I kind of woundered that.
Yeah, that’s better! Now I can see a picture that was blocked before. The man with his arms in the air. I think that cries redemption louder than the red text.
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
I think this is different. He’s not afraid of himself failing at this time, and he’s not afraid of people. He’s stressed out that his wife might get sick with an incurable plague. I feel like it’s different. *shrug* maybe not.
Ah, okay. Maks sence.
You wouldn’t have without seeing the board! lolol
Guess so.
Did I say Beric was…
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whaley replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
I’ll go! Give me a bit to settle myself irl; my body’s really sore from wrestling and I think I need a hot sock or something. XD
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
Wow, thanks! Even got the purple eyes. Is that a crow on a horse in there? Did you put the hand in there for the his wizard scars?
It feels a little too dark for Alan. It needs his bright and heroic side. I don’t see much of a desire to go on or break free from the darkness. Not a big fan of the font. But this does fit the tone…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic Let's Laugh! Writing Memes in the forum Art 1 year, 7 months ago
I didn’t even realize what was wrong in your meme, Ellette, until Rax posted his.
Gandalf not seem to like jokes much.
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
Lol, That’s funny the David one makes you think of Alan. (Isn’t the hair wrong?)
Yes, but it was more of the expression than the hair.
Eric whooped.
I see Eric’s taken up a new hobby, teasing everyone for any signs of love. He better watch his back if he gets a girlfriend.
Joseph drew in a shuddering breath. “I’m so afraid for you…
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
Leo
For a moment he let himself relax into the lorry’s bench. Let his head rest against the back wall as the whole thing bounced and shuddered down the road. Closed his eyes.
But only for a moment. That nagging something twitched again, sending a chill down his spine. His eyes flickered open, his shoulders…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
Okay thank you guys!!! <33
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
*Sighs*
*Quiets inner philosophical monologue about the difference between gingerbread and molasses cookies*
Eh, it really depends. I don’t often actually forget to RP. Just more forget how long it’s been since I last RPed. Last night? Yesterday? The week before?
I’m on it.
*Snort of laughter*
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
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whaley replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
Gotcha.
Love the section! Mainly just a few typos. The orphans are so sweet, and Asher found a girl! 🥰 Poor Beric and Liam, though. 🙁
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
(tagging some other peoples too) @ellette-giselle @jonas @highscribeofaetherium @grcr @anyone-else
Okay….
I have come to a decision lol
I’m keeping the prologue the same, but I’m tweaking a few things with the beginning.
Here’s the new first chapter (it opens when Sef is sixteen years old) Don’t worry, I’m going to edit it and…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
True.
Okay, that makes more sense. But why would William want to do that? What’s out there beside Ardenta? I get he’s coming from an emotionally unstable place, but it seems sort of random.
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