Ellette Giselle

@ellette-giselle

 Don’t you find it a little funny that Aaron is the one to bring the kids back after being the strongest opposer of the idea?

There is an irony in that, which was why I thought the chapter was good. I read the last section you posted as well.

“Finnick is fifteen. In a few years he could find a place of his own,” offered Sabina…

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@ellette-giselle

I think it’s a good idea if I step away from critiquing LTBL. We probably don’t have the same preferences in writing, and I won’t be able to help you if I’m not on the same plane of thought 😅 Good luck with this draft!

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @loopylin @stephie @theshadow

Tis time for the next chapter. Thank you for your patience.

Chapter the 13th – The Guardian

@ellette-giselle

Maybe the fact that you are the first person to say that to me has something to do with it…… I normally get told to let other people be the authors of their own stories and stick to mine.

Okay. I am the author of this story and I won’t take every suggestion you have, but I do like to hear others ideas, so please don’t worry abo…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

But then that makes right-handers day ALL THE OTHER days of the year!!! 😀

Perhaps, but that is less special.

Ok, I’m done giving un-asked for ideas.

 

Sorry.

Not sure why you are apologizing here. Your ideas are welcome.

@keilah-h

and ha I didn’t even notice that with Alan and Oliver in the beginning.

I am kind of glad you…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I will NEVER start a book without a specific goal in mind. I had the end before I had the beginning. There is a certain amount of graphing that I do before every story, and you can be sure that all things will tie into the end of this book, or the plot of the next. I most certainly did outline my book. I’m sorry if you can’t see…

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@whalekeeper

HOW DO YOU DO THAT?!??!?!

Wow it’s like you can read my mind lol!

Anyways….

@ellette-giselle

I totally agree with what Whaley said.

The time jumps just take away so much from the story (even at the beginning where Aaron and Turin were working together) and it makes me lose interest. You do great at describing outside of the…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @ellette-giselle
I can try XD
I think the focus needs to be waaay deeper. The writing is very much outside the characters’ perspective, and only tells the bare points of the story. So the orphanage endeavor feels random.
To compare it to something, the perspective is like a bird high in the sky. Everything below looks like doll…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Just popping in because I’m bored, lol!

I kinda agree with Whaley. The story just doesn’t seem like it’s going towards a specific goal…like the events seem a bit random and idk how to describe it but it’s like your story’s missing something but it frustrates me because I don’t know what exactly I’m missing, just that something…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I’ve already written the whole book.

Oh cool, this is a plenty-of-work-already-done thing.

why do you ask?

I was asking because I’m not sure what direction the story is taking. What should the reader hope to happen next? Both in Aaron’s arc and in the outward plot? – A sense of where this all leads. Because the orphanage plot w…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle FIFTH draft? Wow!!

@ellette-giselle

Are you using a normal arc structure/your own structure based off what you know about arcs? Or just thinking through the arc as you write?

@ellette-giselle

Have you outlined LTBL?

@ellette-giselle

I just read the last section. I don’t have too much to say about it, but it was good!

@ellette-giselle

Because, your country seems to have a little superstition what with the wizards and all that. In the olden days, (which your book is fantasy so i can’t quite tell the era) People were really cruel to lefties because they believed it was a sign of demonic inhabitants or the practice of witchcraft.

Hmm. I don’t think the citizens o…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle haha yeah

@ellette-giselle wow that’s… still terrible

Kinda interesting though how all of these unrelated cultures (Latin, German, Chinese, etc) all equated “left” with “wrong” separately, unless it came about once those cultures all had contact.

Don’t worry, I didn’t think you believed that nonsense lol

@ellette-giselle very cool!!

@ellette-giselle MARVEL QUOTES!!!

haha they have some great ones

@freed_and_redeemed and @smiley will certainly enjoy it too

@ellette-giselle ooh things are going in a new direction! So Aaron and his friends are taking in all the children whose parents were killed in the war?