Ellette Giselle

@koshka

Rory

“Bolts and screws, bolts and screws.” Rory muttered slowly. For the amount of things they taught in Academy, there was very little about normal life. Mostly about killing and the most effective ways to do it. Rory racked his brain. The two words were familiar, but he couldn’t remember having encountered the things they repre…[Read more]

@rae

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I can not believe he just said that to Dante

@rae

I would say it was fulfilled rather than changed. The Bible says not a dot not an iota will go away and nothing will change. (Murdering the wording, but that’s the raw meaning)

Otherwise yeah! Looking forward to the next part.

@rae

this was another good section. I feel like you’re really sinking into a good style and voice with this. I had a slight problem with one sentence though.

When Immanuel came, the laws God previously had placed changed.

I don’t see that in the Bible. If anything, the laws were reinforced more strongly. (You have heard it said do not commit adu…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Who is James? (I think I want him to be someone who is laid back and jokes around a lot, but occasionally has a moment where he shows surprising wisdom.

oh. That’s not at all how I pictured him.

idk if this is a good idea, but I pictured him as quieter and much more thoughtful. Someone who is constantly watching and l…[Read more]

@koshka

I know!! Poor kid. You don’t know whether to laugh or cry.🥺

Rory

Rory leaned against the wall and ran his arm over his forehead. “So, where are we going? Now that I’m your assistant, what should I do?”

(sorry, but Rory and I are equally lost on how to move forward. We don’t know much about the school’s underworld.)

@linus-smallprint

It looks good to me! (But I’m not a huge outliner as previously stated.)

so, does this mean you’re gonna start posting chapters?! 😃

@linus-smallprint

glad I could be of some help!

oh, that makes sense. 😄

@linus-smallprint

good work!!

wait… your hand cramps from writing? Mine never did that. I thought it was a myth.

but I also thought unions burning peoples eyes was a myth until my friend and I were cooking stir fry and she started tearing up really bad while cutting them. 🤣

@linus-smallprint

oh my goodness. She’s a horrible mother. 😂

(and I feel bad for laughing)

I was actually thinking about the magic. It seems to be thought based. Like yours. At first it seems emotion based, but then when I rewatched “let it go” to see if I was right, it seems more thought based. Whatever it is, we aren’t told how she’s c…[Read more]

Oh goodness.
🙄😂

@whalekeeper

oh goodness.
there is so much wrong with that song.
😂

@linus-smallprint

hey, weird question. I was thinking about your magic system……

have you ever seen Frozen?
(I wouldn’t recommend the movie, but I have seen it before and I was thinking about something in reference to it.)

@hybridlore

yeah I missed that with them having won. But maybe that was just me.

oh okay! No problem. Sorry for the confusion.

@the_lost-journal

I don’t see why the priest has to be involved. I could go into this and why I believe it’s unbiblical, but this is a time when I’m not going to. Honestly, are you going to convert me to catholicism? No. Am I going to convert you to Reformed Baptist? No.
I find this topic really interesting, enjoyable, and even helpful, don’t…[Read more]

@hybridlore

I liked that chapter about Cole. Sometimes fillers are okay if they further develop the character. Plus, it was one of your best.
you can even end it with his game death and then have him say something to a friend who’s on the game team about pulling through and winning that last one.
just an idea. But I honestly wouldn’t remove or…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

What are your thoughts on catholic reconciliation? (For those who don’t know, reconciliation is where catholics go (supposed to be at least every month) to confess their sins. And then they are forgiven for them.) And what questions do you have. (That definition is the most simple version, there is more to it.)

I can copy and p…[Read more]

@raxforge   @freed_and_redeemed

Kefa missed your tags.
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@whalekeeper

haha! 🤣

I would love to see a Rory jumping from the bus, arms, hair, legs, and shirt flying! 🤣

if you post anymore drawings let me know!!