Ellette Giselle

@linus-smallprint

Hey, here’s an idea. I have come across some lessons to help improve characters. There are five of them. What if we went through them together, both taking one or two characters that readers felt were flat (that would be Charles and Thom for me) and see what comes out of it? We could invite others to join as well. If we don’t lik…

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@elishavet-pidyon

thanks!!!!

@whalekeeper

Me too!

🤣

@koshka

*gasps in relief and grabs his hand like a lifeline.* NO! Not at all! I’d love to!

(my life is a wreck this week, in case you haven’t noticed. 🤣)

We redecorated the neighborhood, so to speak.

That is amazing! This two have got an awesome relationship! I can’t wait to read their book!

Rory

Rory thought very long and hard about…[Read more]

@koshka

yes!! I do!!! Can I be adopted too?!?? 🥹🥺

Rory

Rory drew in a slow breath as Leo turned off the flame. For a moment that awful scene had threatened to flash through his mind. Thankfully, he’d fought it back.
This time.
“There, all done. Now we let that cool and don’t let any kids sign their names in it like they did the pavem…[Read more]

@koshka

Oh my word! WHY CAN’T HE BE MY OLDER BROTHER!?!? I need a Leo!!😭😍

Rory

“I’ve done this plenty,” Leo said. “Maybe not on tile, but heaps of other stuff. Did it hanging off my ship once when we had an air leak out of atmosphere.”

Ship…. atmosphere. That meant a flying ship. An airplane.

fighter jets

Rory sucked in a sharp bre…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Oh you’re not the one. It was more like you voiced what was already bothering me. I’m sorry if I made it seem like it was somehow your fault. 😌

Maybe God will use this book will encourage Christians to venture into dangerous places to share the gospel!

I’d like that. But even more, I wanted it to wake people up to the fact…[Read more]

@keilah-h

yeah

@keilah-h

Oh It’s not just @linus-smallprint. He just said a few things that have already been bothering me in the back of my mind. It’s this aggravating struggle to rewrite something and pull it out of the ditch of not-so-great writing and up to the level I have worked to achieve now.

It’s always been a story that’s been close to my heart,…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Unless you have something exponentially more important, I’d say go for it.

Why? What reason do I have?

(not to sound dark or depressed. But is it truly worth it?)

@koshka

Rory

Rory slid back, but his eyes were locked on Leo’s hands in a half memorized, half terrified stare. There was a very bad memory at the edge of his mind, and he didn’t know what it was, but he really didn’t want it let out.

@linus-smallprint

I know. *sobs*

Okay, sounds good. Maybe next week?

*sighs* some of this feedback is depressing. I wonder……. these books were written so long ago and comparing them to the stuff I have written now, they’re just not as good at all. Are they even worth trying to rewrite? Rewriting is so hard….. is the message and…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Yay!!!!

aw, thanks for making me laugh. Smaug the laptop ate two years of historical research and I’m so not happy.

I’ll look at this right away!

btw, do you still need me to wait until April now that you sent this?

@koshka

leaving the kid anywhere didn’t seem…wise. He had a back for getting into pickles.

Love that!

Rory

Rory winced slightly at the list Leo had rattled off. He’d used just about every one of those things. And the memories that accompanied the usage were bad. Very bad.

“Looks like we’ve got most of this. Ready for a blowtorch?” Leo asked…[Read more]

@koshka

Rory

Rory’s eyebrows went up. “You build bombs?”

He dropped to his knees beside Leo and instantly recoiled with a stifled gasp of pain. He quickly shifted to a sitting position, absently rubbing his injured knee. Something sharp pricked his other hand and he held up a thin shard. “I found another.”

@koshka

Rory

Rory stared at him. “Is it kind of like tactics? You know, attack plans. The officers organize all the troops so that they can effortlessly wipe out the target.” He paused and chewed on his lower lip. “Maybe not…”

@koshka

You could read his story if you wanted. You never replied after the last chapter I sent.

But you might not like it.

Rory

Rory blinked at the shattered pieces. “Jigsaw puzzle?”

He clenched and unclenched his gloved hands. He was still getting over the water incident. Leo acted like it was all normal, but Rory had never seen anything…[Read more]

@koshka

Ah yes! I would love to see his tactics! Rory is going to pick up so many bad, (possibly useful) habits.

Yeah… well he’s still been through worse. Maybe not physically at this point in his life, but he’s in a far better situation than he was, busted up or not. And as for later…….. this is gentle compared.