Ellette Giselle

@highscribeofaetherium

And eating up beautiful characters deserves a wicked name!!

@highscribeofaetherium

correct. Wyoh had just been banished.

@rae

Yep, highscribe is right. It’s also too friendly. I mean, how dare they eat our pictures!!! This needs to be a horrible terrible villain who is completely depraved and the worst of all master villains because he chews up beautiful characters before THEY EVER SEE THE LIGHT OF DAY!!!!

How about Diablo or Viper!

@freed_and_redeemed

Ok, two things. I would suggest reading this scene out-loud, because there were a few sentences that felt a little jarring and out of flow with the rest. They just needed a different word arrangement or different punctuation.

The other thing would be a suggestion, and that would be this. When Leon is running toward the…[Read more]

@theshadow

Awesome!

@whalekeeper @savannah_grace2009 @linus-smallprint

I’m a little scared……. lol. Here’s a short section.

Aaron had been speaking for more than an hour, carefully explaining the Gospel from the garden to the resurrection. Now, he looked about at the people. A few were crying, most stared at him, in disbelief, and a few had suspicion in…

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@whalekeeper

Great. Thank you so much!

Let’s see, Now to pick up the shattered fragments and begin to rebuild……. lol.

@whalekeeper @savannah_grace2009 @linus-smallprint

I kinda feel like this died out……… should I post anymore or are y’all no longer interested in it? If you aren’t that’s ok.

Thanks for all y’all’s help!

@freed_and_redeemed

Was my heart pounding or what!!!?? man that was so good!!

And harsh. Poor Riker.

Are you all done with that scene, or do you want any editorial comments?

@grcr

It’s not bad! I immediately thought of the soldier characters from Equilibrium…… which are actually evil. lol.

Ok, maybe it is kinda villainous…..

@lightoverdarkness6 @rae

Btw have you seen The Boys In The Boat

I was literally just about to ask that! lol.

That movie was so good!

@savannah_grace2009

 

BUT YOUR SHORT STORY ON YOUR MAGAZINE WAS SO GOOD I GOT CHILLS!!!!

Thank you!!!! You just made my day!!

@savannah_grace2009

 

I get that! Just let us know if you’re ever sick of critiques and just want to hear the positive stuff to get encouraged!

Haha, but that would be all the time…… lol. I don’t like getting told there’s something wrong with my book, but I also know that it will NEVER get better if I don’t have real help from people l…[Read more]

@whalekeeper @savannah_grace2009

Thanks so much! I’m feeling a bit better now.

I had a really rough, hectic day at work, and it’s just one of those days when I want to cry about everything. You know? (Girls, you know what I mean. Linus is probably lost. haha)

As for the 4 book thing, I don’t think I have enough to do 4 books. I will try…[Read more]

 

Aaron looks like he’s kind of mischievous. Thanks for sharing these!

He kinda is at times. lol.

By the way, would you mind if I recruited you to read/give feedback on my project? It is a fantasy story set in a world that is similar in some ways to the Wingfeather world. If you don’t want to or don’t have the time, that is all right.

I was l…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

How far through the story are we?

The beginning. Literally. Like, there is a LOT more to go. 1/8 maybe?

Gotchya. Were there others besides Sabina who did not convert?

yes. I mentioned that there were……. was that not clear enough? should I try to mention a bit more about that? By the time they leave the village a majority of…[Read more]

and I actually drew Aaron and like the drawing!!

Does he look like he’s leaning back to y’all? I can’t figure it out…. but he looks like he’s leaning in that one on the far right……idk, maybe I’ve been staring at it for too long.

@linus-smallprint  @savannah_grace2009 @whalekeeper

Anyone want to see some sketches for LTBL that I did yesterday? Here they are.

I don’t think I like her eyes…… I’ll have to fix them.