Ellette Giselle

@whalekeeper

Oh please forgive me if it’s anything unkind that I said! If it truly is just a preference in writing then that’s okay. I just hope I didn’t offend you!

@linus-smallprint

Not sure why you are apologizing here. Your ideas are welcome.

Maybe the fact that you are the first person to say that to me has something to do with it…… I normally get told to let other people be the authors of their own stories and stick to mine.

@whalekeeper

Is there a goal fulfilled within this first book? I’ve read and watched many series of media, and the ones that make the best impression have an end goal for the entire series and goals for each book/episode.

Yes, of course there is. I wouldn’t write a book without an end goal.

If you have studied story structure that deeply, you sho…

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@savannah_grace2009 @whalekeeper

Someone is having a hard time staying off until Christmas. lolololololol 😀

You might need to try outlining books based on a plot structure…like the Three Act Structure, because it hooks your readers more and you can kind of sense them pushing toward a goal.

Hmmm, well, I have to disagree. I will NEVER start a…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Because the orphanage plot was out of left field XD

Oh, well what did you expect to happen?

Don’t worry. The orphanage plays a key part in all three books.

@keilah-h

yeah, no kidding!! The amount of drafts you go through before a book is perfect!!!

I mean, it grew a lot from the original, and it clearly isn’t finished either.

@whalekeeper

I’ve already written the whole book. This is my fifth draft actually, and I was looking for reader reaction as well as some thoughts from y’all on structure and character since you are authors. Once I post everything on here, I’m passing this off to my editor.

why do you ask?

@whalekeeper

yes.

@keilah-h @theshadow @whalekeeper @linus-smallprint

New scene!

Asher and Eric were only the first of many war orphans who found shelter in the orphanage. On the second day of the two brother’s arrival, a girl came by saying her mother had felt led to give them some children’s clothing and she hoped Sabina could find someone who needed them. Aft…

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@linus-smallprint

Ooo, we haven’t met the Kunulfs yet. If they go after Alan (and Oliver) for being lefthanded you can use their terror to scare the reader.

Ok, I’m done giving un-asked for ideas.

Sorry.

😀

@linus-smallprint

By the way, I discovered today is Lefthanders day (according to Microsoft at least). What a coincidence!

But then that makes right-handers day ALL THE OTHER days of the year!!! 😀

@linus-smallprint

When you say you don’t have much to say, you mean it. lol.

Don’t you find it a little funny that Aaron is the one to bring the kids back after being the strongest opposer of the idea?

@keilah-h

Yeah, I know. it’s horrid.

Anyhow, we’ll see what Linus decides to do with all this info. lol

“Nothing goes over my head. My reflexes are too fast. I would catch it.” — Drax

Captain America: Watch your language!

Drax: How am I supposed to watch language?

Bucky: “I don’t know if you’ve been in a fight before, but there’s not usually this much talking.”

Spiderman: “Oh, sorry!”

Greatest battle in marvel history just ends. Antman: “…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Clarification, I don’t believe all that about witchcraft and the devil involved with left hand. That was just the belief back then. ;D

@keilah-h

Yup, they’re starting to.

@keilah-h

I didn’t say that. I only said they burned their hands and cut their palms. They would also brake a lefty’s hand if they thought he was dangerous or they were especially cruel.

They did it because they are lost sinners and were listening to the devil.

It’s prejudice and superstition in one of it’s mots violent forms.

You see, The…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Why did I suggest it or why did they do it?

@keilah-h @theshadow @whalekeeper @linus-smallprint

new section!!!

The days passed, and the people of Ardenta waited in eager anticipation for the Sabbath. They longed to see each other, to hear from Aaron, and to be united in worship once again. At last, the week’s end came.

Early in the morning, before the sun or soldiers were up, the people w…

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@linus-smallprint

Oh, good. I was sure I did.