Ellette Giselle

@koshka

Rory 

Rory trailed along behind Leo, taking in the older boy’s every motion, every glance, every word. He wanted to make sure he made no mistakes.

Mistakes were costly.

Leo pushed open a door and Rory hesitated a step before following him in.

@linus-smallprint

😊

@linus-smallprint

Don’t have the boys be eaten unless you want to deal with a traumatized Martha. A girl doesn’t watch her friends get swallowed by stone dragons and continue on perfectly fine.

What if there was some sort of earthquake? I believe Martha was on Alan’s horse a bit before? If she’s still on it and there’s an earthquake or something…[Read more]

@hybridlore

How. Dare. You.

IM IN THE CAR DRIVING 10 HOURS AND I CANT WRITE!!!!!!!

@koshka

Rory

Rory jumped. “What? Nothing!” He stood stock still and drew in a slow breath. It’s alright. Leo wont hit me because I ask a question.

Rory ran the tip of his tongue along his lower lip. “I was wondering if we were supposed to get off there or if we were going somewhere else.” He shifted uneasily and made a motion to the elevator.…[Read more]

@rae

you and your messed up warriors!
😆

@koshka

Rory

“Bolts and screws, bolts and screws.” Rory muttered slowly. For the amount of things they taught in Academy, there was very little about normal life. Mostly about killing and the most effective ways to do it. Rory racked his brain. The two words were familiar, but he couldn’t remember having encountered the things they repre…[Read more]

@rae

🫢

I can not believe he just said that to Dante

@rae

I would say it was fulfilled rather than changed. The Bible says not a dot not an iota will go away and nothing will change. (Murdering the wording, but that’s the raw meaning)

Otherwise yeah! Looking forward to the next part.

@rae

this was another good section. I feel like you’re really sinking into a good style and voice with this. I had a slight problem with one sentence though.

When Immanuel came, the laws God previously had placed changed.

I don’t see that in the Bible. If anything, the laws were reinforced more strongly. (You have heard it said do not commit adu…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Who is James? (I think I want him to be someone who is laid back and jokes around a lot, but occasionally has a moment where he shows surprising wisdom.

oh. That’s not at all how I pictured him.

idk if this is a good idea, but I pictured him as quieter and much more thoughtful. Someone who is constantly watching and l…[Read more]

@koshka

I know!! Poor kid. You don’t know whether to laugh or cry.🥺

Rory

Rory leaned against the wall and ran his arm over his forehead. “So, where are we going? Now that I’m your assistant, what should I do?”

(sorry, but Rory and I are equally lost on how to move forward. We don’t know much about the school’s underworld.)

@linus-smallprint

It looks good to me! (But I’m not a huge outliner as previously stated.)

so, does this mean you’re gonna start posting chapters?! 😃

@linus-smallprint

glad I could be of some help!

oh, that makes sense. 😄

@linus-smallprint

good work!!

wait… your hand cramps from writing? Mine never did that. I thought it was a myth.

but I also thought unions burning peoples eyes was a myth until my friend and I were cooking stir fry and she started tearing up really bad while cutting them. 🤣

@linus-smallprint

oh my goodness. She’s a horrible mother. 😂

(and I feel bad for laughing)

I was actually thinking about the magic. It seems to be thought based. Like yours. At first it seems emotion based, but then when I rewatched “let it go” to see if I was right, it seems more thought based. Whatever it is, we aren’t told how she’s c…[Read more]

Oh goodness.
🙄😂

@whalekeeper

oh goodness.
there is so much wrong with that song.
😂

@linus-smallprint

hey, weird question. I was thinking about your magic system……

have you ever seen Frozen?
(I wouldn’t recommend the movie, but I have seen it before and I was thinking about something in reference to it.)