Elfwing

@joy-caroline well I’d suggest giving moments showing her praying and asking God to help her with forgiveness, and showing her conflict with her anger and her want to obey God’s will of forgiveness. Show her earnest desire to follow God’s word I suppose; show the moments of love she gives others when she has the chance, but then her unsurity of…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12 ok sounds like a good plan! 🙂

btw it is fantasy and is not an allegory any more than Lord of the Rings is. I instead strongly incorporate lessons like loyalty, honesty, and forgiveness in my stories. It doesn’t have ‘magic’ as in wizards, and witches and such things if that gives you a better idea. Some of the evil people…[Read more]

@keilah-h ok!! *crack knuckles and sweats nervously XD

first beta reader down XD roseoakauthor at gmail dot com 🙂

@ariel-f it’s 61684

@goldyfantasy12 @keilah-h

It has no language or sexual content (that is something I’m very strict about). It’s adventures of a sister and brother and their journies growing up and crossing the lands. It doesn’t have gory violence, but there are many battles. It’s no more violent than the LoTR. I wrote it for teens.

There’s no strict deadline :)…[Read more]

@devastate-lasting okay all good.  let me know if you want to at some later point too, if not I totally understand

@scoutfinch180

Like I said it’s first draft so there are repeated word choices like utter shock XD

@scoutfinch180

Kaunon has been into a lot of scrape and survived by the skin of his teeth, the scares are from fire battles and a nasty sand dragon that tried to eat him and when that didn’t work it tried to crush him 😂

here is the meeting of Alinnas parents

Gaol kept flying north, and after a few hours of steady flight, passed the m…

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@scoutfinch180

Kaunon has gotten into many scrape and mostly to save dear little Alinna and both of them get into trouble… they’re royals kids, they have little experience with real life outside their homes… the ones you n his face are from protecting Alinna and his friends from a nasty dragon/monster

and here is the first meeting of A…[Read more]

@scoutfinch108

Kaunon has gotten into many scrape and mostly to save dear little Alinna and both of them get into trouble… they’re royals kids, they have little experience with real life outside their homes… the ones you n his face are from protecting Alinna and his friends from a nasty dragon/monster

and here is the first meeting of A…[Read more]

@kathleenramm

Ohhh I love Secret Garden, it’s a lovely book! I should read it again! Who’s your favourite character? I love the robin redbreast.

Children of Hurin is worth the read when you have time! for most people i know who have said that it’s intimidating it’s usually the writing style; it’s like reading an old history textbook for fun.…[Read more]

sorry it keeps eating my reply, so if you get like, five responses you can blame the website i guess? XD

@godlyfantasy12 well… it’s good from what you’ve described and I agree with @gracie-j

Anyways, I’m no expert by any means, but here are things I’ve used for my antagonist

1: moments of vulnerability where he’s honest with the girl he…[Read more]

@godly-fantasy12 well… it’s good from what you’ve described and I agree with @gracie-j

Anyways, I’m no expert by any means, but here are things I’ve used for my antagonist

1: moments of vulnerability where he’s honest with the girl he loves; a good relationship whether close friendship or romance requires honesty and vulnerability on both…[Read more]

@godly-fantasy12 well… it’s good from what you’ve described and I agree with @gracie-j

Anyways, I’m no expert by any means, but here are things I’ve used for my antagonist

1: moments of vulnerability where he’s honest with the girl he loves; a good relationship whether close friendship or romance requires honesty and vulnerability on both…[Read more]

@godly-fantasy well…. *breathes out

I’m no expert by any means, but here are things I’ve used for my antagonist

1: moments of vulnerability where he’s honest with the girl he loves; a good relationship whether close friendship or romance requires honesty and vulnerability on both sides.

(So maybe have scenes with him being open with Jocelyn at…[Read more]

@scoutfinch180 Hi! Thanks for the input. I’ll see how I can improve it for sure! 🙂 I’m not really into emotional scenes of this kind but these two have a special relationship, so I wanted to add it. And this is the first draft which is why there may be repeating words, and thank you for mentioning that as I sometimes forget that kind of stuff X…[Read more]

@kathleenramm oh man good question! I haven’t actually sat down and read a book in months. I’ve been busy with moving across the country and renos and now moving again XD

I’ve listened through the Hobbit and LOTR several times in the last year in audiobook. The last book I actually held in my hands and read was Children of Hurin. Man, that is a…[Read more]

@gracie-j ok! good to know XD, thanks!

@gracie-j yeah I’d say it is KP because that’s happening to me tooat first it scared me because I thought maybe my computer had a virus or something, XD but I tried my phone and it did the same thing