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@dragon-snapper I’ve actually been struggling with this a lot myself, ever since I started focusing on show-don’t-tell. My sentences are choppy. Like this. To show what a character does. Ike crossed his arms. Kaydon sniffed.

I think the key is to focus on some of the emotions and such, and make them longer than the others. These would  be the…[Read more]

@kate-flournoy @dragon-snapper Don’t think it escaped my notice that those were all Loki gifs. Because it didn’t.

Escape my notice, that is.

@ethryndal Ah, we were so young… *stares off into the distance and reminisces*

@dragon-snapper @kate-flournoy How dare you have a gif war and not invite me.

@dragon-snapper Ohh……

Thanks! Okay, I will be a Charlie-reader! *strides forth determinedly* I’ll just try to be on KP more so I actually get all of my notifications… 😅

I could probably do Word. I have a Mac, but I have Word on here so I could be able to do it. I’ll do whatever is sent to me! 😀 😀

But yeah, Google would probably be…[Read more]

@dragon-snapper unfortunately, I don’t think I know enough to be able to help you, but it looks like you got some awesome advice already 🙂

@ariella-newheart  AAAA! Missed you!

*sighhhh* Anyway, I’m back. Hopefully 😉

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@Dragon-Snapper Have pancakes. They fix everything, you know. *pancakes*

@Dragon-snapper yeah. They said it. 😛

@Dragon-Snapper I’m just gonna shove this on you because this taught me almost everything I know about choppiness.

And as far as action/dialogue tags… that’s when things get tricky. Like Daeus said, it’s a complicated dance of changing up the pattern of things. What I’ve found helps is when you take a basic action and elaborate on it. Don’t…[Read more]

@dragon-snapper  Oh, didn’t see your earlier post. Byeeeee

@dragon-snapper  Still here?

@kate-flournoy @dragon-snapper I literally left this thread alone for a hour or so… and I come back and BREAKING NEWS: AN EPIC GIF WAR HAS BROKEN OUT, JUST IN CASE ANYONE FORGOT HOW EPIC AND BONKERS KAPEEFERS ARE.

@dragon-snapper  Ohhhh, I see

Yup. Gamma and epsilon are Greek.

@dragon-snapper I’m not really an expert on this, but the thing that’s helped me most is mixing things up — variety.

Variety in sentence length. I like to mix long, short, and medium sentences in a fairly even blend.

Variety in sentence openers. Too many subject openers in a row can get choppy. Try to throw in some -ings,…[Read more]

@dragon-snapper Ahhh, interesting! 🙂

Why aren’t they called Gamma and Epsilon? (Honestly Charlie and Echo are awesome names, it’s just…)

@dragon-snapper  Alpha? Beta? Charlie?! How many types of proofreading are there?!

@dragon-snapper Ah, that makes sense. I sit on my bed, though. It’s a wee bit softer than the floor. And it has pillows! 🙂

@dekreel I can’t wait to read it.

Right now, me and my MC are plotting how to sneak a group of people into a fortified castle.

@dragon-snapper Out of curiosity, if you melt all chairs, what do you sit on to write?

@dragon-snapper  Same, though. XD

Thanks for the melt. I needed that. *forces self to return to story* Sheesh. “Favorite part,” I said.

@dragon-snapper  *hands walking stick to my brain* Sighhh