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Ah, see ya! @rochellaine

And I actually must be heading off for lunch now. @seekjustice but I should be back soonish.

@catwing Goodnight!

@seekjustice @jess-penrose I’m actually going to say goodbye now too.  I don’t know if I’ll be back tonight, but probably not.  So goodnight!

@jess-penrose

Ah no, I don’t think she did. It was fun anyway though!

@seekjustice Haha, right. Sorry, I take it Jane did not pick up that habit from KP…wonder where from then… *shrugs*

@jess-penrose 🙂

@catwing I have trouble with showing not telling as well, so much of my editing involves fixing it! You are not alone in this struggle!

@Rochellaine i don’t think we were supposed to, but Jess did and I liked my last line so I did too!

I hope your confusion lessens some time soon 🙂

@catwing Oh yay! I’ll happily look through it again! Hmm… It could be good. Have I mentioned anything about passive voice? And goodnight!

@rochellaine Hahaha, no clue. I just tend to whenever I war with my cousin. So, she may have invented that, or maybe she got it from somewhere else… but I always tend to do it anyway ‘cos it can be fun to read them.

@seekjustice Yes…Someday. 😛  Of course I thank you!  But my fingers are feeling confused right now, since they don’t know where to go.

@jess-penrose Oh, are we supposed to give our last lines?  I’ve never done that before.  But mine was kind of weird… “With a quick shove, Chara managed to stand up, and then toppled…”  😉 😀

@jess-penrose Yeah, I have trouble showing, not telling. 🙁
Maybe after I go through all these and get the revised doc to you. I’m revising it in a different doc. 🙂
Just wondering, did you think I needed to develop the characters more?

@rochellaine @seekjustice I have to go to bed. Good night.

@seekjustice Oooh nice!

@jess-penrose

My last line was:

above the din came Errol’s voice, but I could not distinguish his words from the rest of the chaos.

your last line is very interesting too 😉

@Rochellaine

Sorry, you’ll thank me one day though (or maybe not)

@rochellaine Woah! You must be a fast writer! 447 is my top record for a ten minute word war.

@catwing Oh yeah. I can’t say I enjoy it when I have to go back through and cure my work of random zombies that decide they want to mess up my story. *glares suspiciously at them.*

And if you want me to have another more thorough go-through of it I’m quite happy to. I’m on holidays now, so yay! Not as much school work to get done this time. xD

Ohh…I just realized that I usually do fifteen minute word wars, so that makes me feel a little bit better. 🙂  But still.  I usually get at least four hundred words in a ten minute war.

@rochellaine *pats* That’s alright! You still have gotten words written!

@jess-penrose Okay.  That was the absolute worst performance I have ever given in a word war!  I got 203 words written, which I believe is half of my lowest score ever!

@seekjustice I am going to blame you. 😉  After all that horrible slashing and cutting you did to my story I hardly know where I am anymore! 😛

384 words

Last Line: ‘I told you to get home late. ‘

Good job @seekjustice

@jess-penrose @rochellaine

Me too! I got 375. How’d you guys go?

And I have stopped. @rochellaine @seekjustice

@jess-penrose @rochellaine

Ten minutes, sounds good!

@seekjustice Unfortunately I’m editing, so no Word War.
@jesspenrose Yes I’m curing all those zombies you pointed out. Thanks again. 🙂