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@ethryndal

Thank you! Yes, that’s what I’m thinking too. Yes, I agree. Liam is supposed to be Josiah’s Helper on his Hero’s Journey, but he’s not really that fleshed out, so it would probably be better to cut him. 🙂 Thank you SO much for your help!!

@ethryndal

WOW! Thank you so much! I will definitely be thinking about this! Part of it may be hard for me because it is a short story, so every word is important and I feel like I don’t have a lot of space. But portraying emotions is really important (particularly for this short story)

Thank you again!! 🙂

See you around!

@ethryndal @Jane-maree @winter-rose

Also, some feedback I got from Jane Maree was to show more of his emotions rather than his obvious physical reactions. When you said, Jane, in your comment ” I can tell that Josiah is angry because of how he’s acting, but I want to know more like – is he also nervous? – Is this a clear/calm anger or a furious…[Read more]

@ethryndal

Do you have any tips on how to show Josiah’s anger?

Like I mentioned in the Writer’s Corner I want Josiah to be a character who has a passionate and fiery spirit, and will act without thinking when he sees injustice. This is a great strength of his, but he needs to learn to use wisdom on how and when to act. He needs to…[Read more]

@winter-rose

Thank you for your feedback and for taking the time to read!

@jane-maree

Thank you for taking time out of your busy schedule to read and leave feedback! I hope you have fun this weekend!

@cloudy Thank you for taking the time to read and leave a comment! I’ll consider what you said about that line, and see if I want to remove it.

@ethryndal

Thank you so much for your encouragement, as well as taking the time to beta-read my story. I admit it has been hard, but I know that receiving feedback can help strengthen my writing. (That is one area where I really need to grow as a writer :))

Also, thank you so much for the suggestion about the part with Reuben! I really like it…[Read more]

@jane-maree

*waits in anticipation*

*goes over to do homework* 🙂

@Jane-Maree

Ok, I just posted it under a new thread, so whenever you’re ready feel free to take a look!

Thank you so much!

@Jane-Maree

Thank you! No problem! If it doesn’t work, feel free to let me know!

*accepts pizza*

(In real life I can’t have pizza, so this is great!) 🙂

@Jane-Maree

Thank you! I still have a lot of editing and changing to do! Yes, I do have a deadline. The assignment is due on Monday of this week. I’m hoping to post it today for people to beta read, and get it back by tomorrow or Friday if possible? That would give me the weekend to make edits and incorporate the feedback. Does that work for…[Read more]

@dragon-snapper Great! Thank you!

@dragon-snapper

Awesome! Just curious, what time zone are you in?

I’m in Washington State so it is 3:00 p.m. here. 🙂

@dragon-snapper

Hello! I’m here! Are you still on? I’m going to write a scene of my short story. 🙂

@winter-rose @ethryndal @graciegirl @jane-maree

Hello!

I did some re-writing of my short story today, and will continue to edit it. I still have one scene I need to write, and a character description to fit in somewhere. 🙂 My goal is to try to have it ready and send it your way tomorrow, so we’ll see how it goes! If I can’t finish it by then,…[Read more]

@jane-maree Thank you! Yes…I probably should have mentioned how long it is. 🙂

@winter-rose About 10 pages.

@jane-maree Yes! Awesome! Thank you! 🙂