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@dekreel CHAP is a homeschool conference in Pennsylvania.  Last year I was there with my family as vendors for our family ministry, and Josiah was there with a KP booth.

@dekreel I agree with the others, that it could benefit from more tension. I’d also try to think of ways to make the main characters more distinct from each other. This could also be a source of conflict, not that they dislike each other, but that different personalities can create obstacles they have to overcome because they care about each…[Read more]

@dekreel Oh my gosh! I did that but with a chess game. Well, sort of. I wrote a short story from the point of view of the chess pieces. I thought it was funny at the time. Needs a lot of polishing now.

You know you’re a writer when you see a stranger with a cast and proceed to come up with fifty stories of how they got the cast.

@dekreel Of course you had to end it there!

I rather enjoyed it. Based on other books I’ve seen, I’d place the target age around 8-10. It’s a good story, kinda simple, but similar in style to other books I’ve read for the 8-10 range.

Now, I’ve never seen those shows you’ve mentioned so I can’t say anything in regard to similar plots or…[Read more]

@dekreel *facepalms* yeah, just realized you stated the age of the MC at the beginning, sorry.

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Okay! Thanks. Looking forward to reading it! : )

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This actually isn’t all that bad. The writing flows nicely and does fit that of a children’s book. Though I agree with @sam-kowal that there is not enough tension that would keep a reader (especially a child) engaged. The story so far seems to be more of a description of the events that are happening as there is not much conflict or…[Read more]

@dekreel I don’t have to time to give it a full beta-read, but I scanned a few pages of it.

I’ve never watched those tv episodes you mentioned so I have no dea if it was contrived… honestly, for children’s stories, it seemed well done, though. The story moves along nicely and it seems… I can’t think of another word than polished, which is to…[Read more]

I’m here, everyone! Working on my roleplay! Anyone else writing or procrastinating? @dekreel @seekjustice @clairc @jane-maree @rochellaine @ariella-newheart

@dekreel Okay! (But I’d still prefer to be a dog…I honestly think it fits me better than a dolphin) 🙂🐶

@dekreel I’d love to critique this! what age group is it for? and you want us to leave comments in the google doc right?

@dekreel MAGNIFICENT!!!!!!!! I can’t believe I missed this when it came out! TOP NOTCH!!!

@dekreel   Ooooohhh  Ok!  If you want to, then sure, I’d love to be part of it!  😀

@winter-rose @dekreel Bye guys! Write with you later. 🙂

@dekreel Nah, it’s all good. 🙂 It’s still an annoying school essay. That hasn’t changed at all from high school to college. 🙂 I still somehow get my mom to read all my essays.

@dekreel Well, now I kinda take only business classes. They’re college classes.

@dekreel     😀  Ok!             I don’t know why you say you don’t write that much, this was really fun!

I’m not quite sure what being in KPA means, but Sure!

@dekreel My project is a report for taking a product or service international. It has to be like an actual business report you’d hand in to your boss.

My reason for it being awesome for the KPA being finished and posted in March might be because my birthday may or may not be in March. 😉

@winter-rose Thanks! 🙂

@dekreel   Oh!  Good job!  I really like it!

I’m just wondering what I was tagged for…  Is it just random or…?  The annoyance of being new…

@dekreel Whoa! Having the whole thing finished by March would be awesome! (for more than one reason) 🙂

I think I’ve got most of the rewriting for the report done. Now I just need to add in a chart (which takes a wee bit more research) and do the intro and conclusion. I think I might just be able to turn it in before the due date! 😀