Hannah Whatley

@kate-flournoy I haven’t seen their names in a while. :/

And I must say, I like Finn’s outfit. The only thing in that trailer that I wasn’t sure about was that…penguin thing. I sincerely hope he isn’t one of those really stupid comic reliefs.

@Daeus first of all, it’s Rey and Finn. An e, and two ns. Get it right.

Second of all— yes. I noticed. And I like that. Because he seems to be doing a lot better. *nods*

@Dragon-Snapper noooooo! 🙁 🙁 🙁 I’m so sorry. I have no idea why.

@kate-flournoy Yes! And you didn’t see Ray with Fin either. 😉 Fin was off with the rebellion, right where he belonged. *big happy smile* Good ‘ole Fin. That mechanic sounds just right for him.

@Emma-Flournoy of course. But since her son obviously couldn’t make himself do it— *gross sobbing*— I’m not quite clear on how, yet.

Ehh… I revived. 😛

@Emma-Flournoy he finds a nice sweet mechanic who also comes from a hard past and isn’t too high or great for him. *nods*

NOT TO MENTION THERE IS ‘REDEMPTION ARC’ WRITTEN ALL OVER THIS THING.
Seriously— his denial? His frantic craze to bury the past? It should have already been buried. He shouldn’t be having to struggle through this again.
But he is.
Which means…

*explodes from contained excitement and dies*

@Daeus I KNOW. I’m just… trying to play it cool here.

Trying.

Tryyyyinnnnggggg…

*deep breath* If I get too excited I’ll be let down. So. I shall not get excited.

*faints from excitement*

Okay, so the one big takeaway from this trailer… I think… NO PROMISES, BUT I THINK—! I could see a relationship between them working.
My biggest…[Read more]

Sorry, I was being dramatic there.

Let me put this in cool, rational terms. This is the best thing since The Count of Monte Cristo. 🙂

Ooooohh…

OOOHHH. OOOOOOOOH. OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHH.

OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Yes! Yes! Yes! I could almost weep now. Let it be so!

@allison-grace lol. Which journal? (I fill mutiple) Journaling is is one way I process life so… I have a lot of ’em.
One notebook I keep is for all the little life lessons I learn. It’s pretty awesome to go back and read where you’ve been in life and what you’ve learned.
Another is written in a letter form more about what I’m doing in life and…[Read more]

@Daeus Congratulations. The world could use more of those. 😉

@daeus Yes yes yes! That is what I want. Okay…..I can’t wait to start outlining this now!

@kate-flournoy Haha! I’m a mind reader too now. 😀

@bethanysinkyroses First, I think the Yellowstone setting could work. As far as the plot goes, my suggestion would be to make it a “back and forth” plot. What I mean is, have two distinct spheres for your story: one, the sphere of the MC’s interaction with her mother; the other, the sphere of…[Read more]

@mark-kamibaya @kate-flournoy @daeus You guys are the best. Thanks. I really needed some brutally honest feedback.
Okay, I was definitely wondering about the genre-mixing. I’ll see what I can do about real animals with intelligent-seeming attacks. (Daeus, I find it creepy that you almost nailed my original idea to a T. Like even that scene you…[Read more]

She can be a stereotype on the outside without being one on the inside. If she isn’t a POV character, maybe she could have someone she can confide in.

@bethanysinkyroses I’d agree with what Mark and Kate said. You’ve got a setting, but you don’t have any sort of plot. Predicaments alone are very boring. The predicaments need to build on each other. The outcome of one should lead to another, gradually making things worse and worse.

I also agree that clashing fantasy and slice of life isn’t a…[Read more]

@bethanysinkyroses that would be @sierra-r and I have forgotten Cindy’s as well. 😛

The first thing that strikes me as I read your summary here is that you’ve focused a lot on symbolism.
That’s a good thing. But it can also be a hindrance. In my experience, when I focus too much on the symbolism of a thing, it comes out one-dimensional as only…[Read more]

@warrioroftherealm no character is ever cliche if they are approached as a person with a logical reason for being who and where they are in life. It sounds like this woman has a very good reason for being ‘strong’.

At the same time, I think ‘strong woman’ is frequently misunderstood or misinterpreted. A strong woman is not a masculine woman. A…[Read more]