Hannah Whatley

@writefury, YES! We should totally do that. 🙂

*bows scaly head contritely, snuffs smoking nostrils* I repent me of my caustic tongue, and crave thy pardon, honorable sir, for thy fright. I am ashamed.

@Daeus @writefury

*bows scaly head contritely, snuffs smoking nostrils* I repent me of my caustic tongue, and crave thy pardon, honorable sir, for thy fright. I am ashamed.

So this is kinda freaky. Like, one moment you think you’re talking to a girl, and then the next she turn into a dragon. I mean, I know we talk about fantasy and such occasionally but -. I hope she doesn’t eat me. So – like, isn’t there a rule against having claws on the forum. I should probably report this.

Is this something that only happens to…[Read more]

Wow, this is beautiful poem, @jadamae. About the last line of the second stanza, I personally like “as her fingers with music teem” better, but they’re both beautiful.

Wait @Daeus— you like that book? Wow. I… I’m just… I never would have guessed. 😛

*cracks claw knuckles, shakes out wings, narrows glowing dragon eyes*

Complain, sirrah? Nay, I did but query as to thy meaning, forsooth. I pledge mine honor, if heretofore thy word in question (verily) hath entered into my knowledge I knew it not, nor, methinks, should be held accountable.
Thus I plead my case to thee, sirrah— mind thy…[Read more]

Wow @zoe-wingfeather… I definitely was NOT expecting to get any potential customers at this stage of the book! 😛 I’ll be sure to tell you, though it won’t be published for quite a while…

Yes, @Daeus— Count of Monte Cristo is the perfect example of reusing plot points and characters. It’s so wonderfully complicated! The only thing I might…[Read more]

That’s one of the reasons I love the Count of Monte Cristo so much. No waste. Everything is used. Did I mention I like that book? I like that book.

@kate-flournoy Forsooth Sister, wherefore doest thou complain of so uncouth a speech as I may make? Whither wendist thine imagination to so great a height as to miss its first steps, I vouch my honor doth verily confound my noggin.

Sure @jadamae

I’d just do some little things to make it flow better. First of all, I’d agree with what Kate said, so I won’t repeat it. Here are my ideas:

Stanza 1, line 4: Might shorten to “Some fast, some slow”

Stanza 2, line 2: Take out the “the” at the beginning

Stanza 3, line 3: Add “them” to the end.
Line 4: Take off “Many” from the…[Read more]

@Daeus— Verily, saidst thou? Pray, what is this verily of which thou speakest, brother? Methinks thou dost speak of some… some word of olden times, but alas! I have no skill in the understanding of such antiquated languages… thy ‘verily’ hath quite overcome me…

*claps hand over mouth, smothers hysterical snicker*

Sorry, couldn’t…[Read more]

@Daeus— Verily, saidst thou? Pray, what is this verily of which thou speakest, brother? Methinks thou dost speak of some… some word of olden times, but alas! I have no skill in the understanding of such antiquated languages… thy ‘verily’ hath quite overcome me…

*claps hand over mouth, smothers hysterical snicker*

Sorry, couldn’t resist. 😉

It’s quite beautiful— love the title! A few lines I would change, just for the sake of better rhythm. The first is

Spotlights shine on the scene

I would just replace ‘on’ with ‘upon’. And the last line of that stanza… I’m not sure which would work better, or if either would work best at all. You might try saying something about a ‘dream’…[Read more]

@kate-flournoy “Yea Sister, verily.”

Hey, glad it was helpful guys! I should just start a topic called ‘mistakes’ and post all the writing mistakes I make in that one. 😉

@Jadamae… well… I’ve got several lined up already, but I’m not about to turn anyone away if they’re interested… 😀 I just hate shoving my work off on other people so I don’t like to ask. 😛 😉

KeePers of the Kingdom? 😉

Grace, peace, and high word counts to you, my brothers! And… er… sisters.

*laughs hysterically*

That’s awesome, @Daeus!

Nope. Didn’t work. I’ll just give you the link. https://www.pinterest.com/pin/341710690457182648/

Love it, @bluejay! Looking at that prompt, I couldn’t decide whether it was a sword on his back or the pipes of a bagpipe. 😛 I ended up not mentioning it at all, and I guess that was fine. 😉

Now let’s see if I can figure out the ‘image’ setting so I can post the picture and you can actually see what I’m talking about. Here goes…

@kate-flournoy, Good to know! I know I’ve said this before, but thanks for sharing your mistakes with us so we don’t make the same ones. 🙂 Congratulations on finishing your novel!!!!!