Daeus

@xonos-darkgrate @daeus Maybe it’s that, the power is used by everyone, but depending on who you use it through and for if it’s light or dark or grey. It could be like praying, if you pray to God (the only one you’re supposed to pray to), or to idols or other things.

Okay, so first. I’ve considered the storyline I’ve been making, and the concept of making an allegory, so I thought I’d just drop the act and admit that it’s more of an allegory than anything else.

So… I’ve made a few changes to explain things better and to fit the Bible more!

1. “magic” in this story is really God’s power. But when others…[Read more]

@xonos-darkgrate what @Daeus said, basically.

Otherwise I think it looks very solid. You seem to already have a lot of thematic material (foils and such) to work with, so you’re starting out with a wide perspective and plenty of stuff to juggle around. Also you seem to know what to do with that stuff, which is always a plus. XD

As for names……[Read more]

Thanks everyone!
I worked on this when I wasn’t sleepy. ( 😛 )

You Were Called By The King

Alex is not normal. She and her friends talk to animals.
But in the course of a few days the normal of their abnormal lives is shaken. They all receive a mysterious riddle from a cloaked messenger of a long dead tyrant king.

One Crown, Three Parts
Soft,…[Read more]

@xonos-darkgrate I’m going to have to think on this a bit more. But for starters…

The few chosen to actually be able to manipulate the otherwise forbidden source of the universe

Why is it forbidden? By who? Why can they wield it?
@daeus had some good advice.
Also this could be an allegory. If you wanted.

Those names could work. The Mymar…[Read more]

@perfectfifths It was a coincidence.
@seekjustice @jess-penrose @daeus @emily Thanks all! Here’s two new versions…

I wasn’t sure which way to go, so I’m trying both. (They are improving. Slowly.)
I’ll keep playing around with it, in the word pit. 😉
Which do you like better and what are your thoughts?

You Were Called By The King

Alex and…[Read more]

I’m gonna tag @daeus because he’ll probably be able to tell you more than I can.

In my opinion, this is a bit too long, and it reveals a bit too much about the story. I can’t tell you how or where to cut, but that’s just my thought. You want to keep a bit of the story to reveal later, right?

Ok, thanks @daeus. I did want to do it myself, because *I don’t want to spend money if I don’t need to* but I’m not sure how to go about it. @kate-flournoy? Little help?

I have nothing. @aislinn-mollisong I probably should find it out myself. But these people have published… @daeus @hope Perhaps they can help you? {Okay I do have tags. 😉 )

@aislinn-mollisong Harold and Arianwen are two of the characters in my WIP… and yes, you can read it, when it’s ready. 😉 Tell you guys what— I’ll just start a topic here when it is and tag those of you I can remember, and the rest of you can jump on and remind me, ‘kay?
@Emily @Shannon

@Daeus *cringes* sorry…

@That_Writer_Girl_99 *whinily* Uncle Owen, this one’s got a bad MOtivator!

*ahem*

But we must cut him some slack. Considering one of his students went straight up crazy and started massacring people, it doesn’t surprise me that his mental capacities *cough* (manners) *choke* have finally fled.

*taps fingers sternly* Hmm, very bad, @Daeus, very…[Read more]

I’m here @ethryndal

Okay, can we just talk about Luke for a second? I’m very disappointed in him. It looks like he straight up kicks out Rey? Rude, Luke, rude.

I want one of those fuzzy things too. Desperately. Even if @daeus doesn’t approve.

@Emily I’m unnecessarily hard on myself and use photoshop. 😛
@Shannon thank you! You hadn’t mentioned that, but… I can put you on the list, if you like. 🙂 And no, I love that movie. One of the most quotable movies of all time. 😛
@Mariposa mmm… more like a lonely villain. 😉 Thank you though. 😀

@Daeus it’s… um… for the eleventh book.

Okay guys I made another one. You people are positively a bad influence.

Yes, it’s another antagonist. I won’t say villain because he isn’t quite, but he comes pretty close. His name is Nisien and he’s basically immortal.

@Dragon-Snapper @Emily @Shannon @Ingridrd @GracieGirl

@Daeus, this is Harold and Arianwen’s son. *hides under the table*

@radically-surrendered, @emerald-flyer, @emily, @kballen, @josiahdeboer, @daughteroftheking, @dragon-snapper, @daeus, @lifeofkatie, @that_writer_girl_99, @kate-flournoy

Thanks for the replies! I really appreciate the help!

Jackson E. Graham

@dragon-snapper Hey! WOW that sounds totally epic! I might check it out. Thanks for letting me know. 🙂

Also, have any of you used the writing software by K. M. Weiland? She’s based it off her Outlining Your Novel Workbook… it looks sooooooooooo good. There’s a video on this page:…[Read more]