Catwing

@jane-maree *takes all the pizza*
@catwing I is the fiery friend. *grins*

@catwing Have I been summoned? Well, i actually just started to write! Great timing!

@jane-maree @catwing I’ll join you guys!

@Catwing
I have been summoned. I come.
I’ve got one chapter left to critique so I’ll join you!

@catwing Oooo….she’s saying it. Which makes it even more awesome!

@ingridrd Yes will pray, man I hope she doesn’t have that!
@catwing yay!!

@emily lol Each person I know who is out of state says their state is better, I LOVE texas but since I’m a “northerner” I like the cold better. 😛 😉 Yeah just under an hour and a half north.

@catwing To be honest, I want to read it too. *sigh* Now I have to finish writing this trilogy to get there….
Little details: There’s a hat, a jet and a party.
Eventually, it will have beta-readers. Eventually…

@catwing Awww…glad he was okay!

@catwing Good job with the improvements. 😀

I also liked @perfectfifths‘ improvements. I’ll go off those and add some adjustments myself.

Alex is not normal. She and her friends talk with animals. (No need to say they understand animals. That’s assumed if they talk with them.)

Then she and her friends meet a mysterious cloaked messenger, who…

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@seekjustice @jess-penrose @jane-maree *feels really pleased my suggestions were so helpful* 😉 😛

@catwing Ultimately it’s up to you to decide. And based on all the versions I’ve read, each one giving a little more about the story than before, yet still keeping it a mystery, I’d love to read this book as well. 😀

@catwing I like the second one too, and I like the suggestions @perfectfifths has made. I would read the book based on that blurb, which is ultimately what you want!

@catwing I prefer your second version heaps, it’s more… blurby. And I also really like the few little tweaks that @perfectfifths made. *thumbs up* Good job!

@Catwing well I was away last night and this morning, so I failed to see this until just now, sorry. xD Looks like you’ve have lots of great advice though. 😀
I second what Louise said–her rewritten synopsis of suggestions is basically what I would’ve said myself. 😛

@catwing HOW DID I MISS THIS WHOLE THREAD?? Well, you have folks with more experience than I, but I’ll submit my two cents anyhow. I like the second one better. I don’t have any suggestions as to how to change it, other than “listen to the other Kapeefers.” They’re a smart bunch. 😉 Very excited to read this story!

@catwing He is actually somewhat of a chemist, and he possibly makes a chemical that makes things explode. “I can fix this! Probably….”

@catwing I think I like the second one better, but with a few tweaks (all suggestions of course 😉 ).

Alex is not normal. She talks with her wolves. And understands them.
Then she and her friends meet a mysterious cloaked messenger, who gives them a riddle from a long dead tyrant. They must save Allore by finding three jewels, and giving them to…[Read more]

@catwing First of all, go get a copy of How To Write A Sizzling Synopsis. It’s a very good book.

That said, here are a few tips to get you started. I’m working off your most recent synopsis.

1. Yes, use as few names as possible. Say “main character and his five friends” or something like that.
2. When you say these people are not normal–even…[Read more]

Okay @catwing, I’ve re-pasted this below for you to see if that works any better in your mind without changing any words.

Jack, Alex, Cele, John, Chase, and Amelia are not normal.

Even before they met a mysterious messenger, who says they have to save Allore by finding three jewels and giving them to the king. But the king was said to have…

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@catwing a lot of people have already put in their opinions, but I just wanted to add my two cents worth. I personally think there are too many people mentioned in your blurb. Its confusing. I don’t know how you’ve written the story, but do you have one or two characters that are more main than the rest? If you do, I would rewrite it like…[Read more]