Faith

@rae

Dante

Dante stared at the knife for a long moment, not responding. It stabbed through his coat sleeve, pinning it to the door. Once his heartbeat slowed back down, he let out a deep breath and pulled out the knife.

“Nah, just nicked me,” he said, casually handing it back to Alpha.

He then took off his coat, showing the shallow cut on his…[Read more]

@theshadow

I would love to see it!

@theducktator

Lol. Everything looks better with an ellipse.

I’ll watch that. 

@linus-smallprint

I will answer your audience questions in a few days when I have time. :]

@the_lost-journal @hybridlore

I think me and shadow are the only people on here who write anything creepy… 😂

You’re not the only ones. My Lovedream project is sci-fi fantasy mixed with horror, or something like that.

@theshadow

I’m following along! And I’ll answer any group questions you post; for now, I’ll stay quiet. *Ninja reads*

@linus-smallprint

Awesome! I approved it.

@keilah-h @ellette-giselle

Y’all were talking about British and Australian exclamations and it reminded me of something that happened recently…

So we have friends who are Australian, but their dad is the only one who actually naturally has the accent. I’m a sucker for the Aussie accent, lol. And I was talking with him one time and with some…[Read more]

Also, one thing I just thought of; we don’t really care about the characters’ families since we haven’t met them yet. Maybe it would be a good idea to lengthen the first chapter by showing Jack and Elina getting home and seeing their parents and siblings.

@theshadow

This chapter does a good job building up the suspense! The only thing I would say is yeah, Ellette has a point. These girls seem to be so mean for no real reason that I can guess at yet. It makes them feel flatter, rather than like actual people who have motives and stuff for their actions. Their ultimate goal, especially in a…[Read more]

@anyone This is long, sorry

Liko

At 6:00 am, while the school halls were still mostly quiet and empty, Liko arrived at work, holding a bucket in one hand. The contents of the bucket sloshed and jiggled at his side as he made his way to the supply closet. After setting the bucket down, he unlocked the closet door.

First thing’s first: clean the…[Read more]

@jonas

Wow. I love this idea. This sounds super interesting. Is it connected to your current series?

@ellette-giselle

Aw, that’s okay! If you know of a different way to get it through, I’m open to trying other things, but I understand if it’s too difficult for you to do right now.

@jonas

My favorites are Chromancy, Spectrachromy, and Prismaturgy. I think Chromamancy has too many syllables.

Also I’m really intrigued by the idea of a color based magic system, if that’s what this is. It sounds cool.

@theducktator

If you want, I have a character in the school that you can have your characters meet. I haven’t written anything for him yet but I will in a bit.

Dante

“Banned for life! Ya got that? Show your face around here again and I’m calling the cops!”

Dante Tucker found himself being forcefully thrown out of a shop at seven in the morning and into the street. A poorly trimmed bush by the sidewalk broke his fall.

“… One-eyed freak.”

The front door slammed behind him.

Dante picked himself u…[Read more]

Some things I’d really like to hear from y’all are scene ideas. I’m planning to go back and extend a lot of the earlier chapters (at least 1-6) because I didn’t have the same word count goal for them as I do now. So if you have any ideas for scenes that would fit into those (or future scenes) I would love to hear them. So far I have a chapter…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle (I know you’re away, so don’t feel obligated to respond to this until you get back) @theshadow @whalekeeper @koshka @raxforge

Sorry these are late, it slipped my mind until last night. Without further ado, here are chapters seven and eight (also known as the underground church cha…[Read more]

@jonas

My favorite is Chromancy, but I also like Chromamancy, Prismathurgy, and Spectrathurgy. For some reason the sole “t” and “l” sounds bother me when placed in front of “urgy”.

@theshadow

Sorry it took me a day to get back to you. Even though you said you didn’t like this first chapter much, I think it has potential. It introduces the characters and their world pretty well. It is a very short chapter. Is that normal throughout the book, or is this the exception? It’s fine to have shorter chapters, but I think it might…[Read more]