Faith

@theshadow @anyone

~ Mentions of several sensitive topics all at once, sensitive people should not read ~

I really want to give an example of a too-dark story idea so Shadow doesn’t feel too bad about the atomic bomb idea.

I know a girl who is writing a fanfic love story. In it, the guy gets sent to war before making a proposal. Many of his…[Read more]

@keilah-h

This is still a serious topic though, I agree with you. I’ve seen darker on this website from a graphic perspective. Not to attack Godly, but she once posted a roleplay with a rather disgusting abuse description. I had to skip over it for my little sisters.

The abuse topic is strange to me. I feel almost numb to it because we’ve talked…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I didn’t mind that new revelation because it was barely mentioned. It goes right over a little kid’s head. And a Pythonos/Payne baby is an interesting challenge.

But I understand @keilah-h because the age at which you learned about these things makes a difference. If a teen writer is new to real-world dark stuff, they like to…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Thank you so much!! I’m glad you enjoyed it! Yeah, I’m dyslexic, and I told my parents that if I found fewer than fifty editing things I’d be okay lol. I’ve read through the book and saw those errors too, but figured it wouldn’t be worth republishing over since it’s not as many as I thought.

I have at least three books planned, but t…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

Yay!! I love it!!

@ellette-giselle

So, on the front cover, I agree that the title feels a little cramped. Maybe enlarge it a little and move your name to the bottom?

Also, I would remove the “By:” and just put your name. In my opinion, it feels more professional, but it’s up to you if you like that version more.

The cover illustration is beautiful!

On the back,…[Read more]

*considers what characters I should have drawn next…*

@ellette-giselle

I’ll try my best to read through your WIP, but I can’t make any promises since I’m also helping two other people with their stories. (:

@ellette-giselle

That is so cool!!

@ellette-giselle

It sounds really cool! Are you looking for format critiques, or is it too late for that?

@theducktator

I look at it briefly in the beginning and sometimes go back to look at it. It honestly just depends. Like, I love the maps in the Wingfeather Saga, but in some other books, I don’t enjoy looking at the maps as much, lol.

@ellette-giselle

It looks so good!! Did you design it yourself?

@theducktator

I like to get to know it before starting the book, then I occasionally reference it during reading, but don’t have to.

@theducktator
I skim it in the beginning and then normally don’t go back to it…  Maybe once or twice, but not every time a place is mentioned. 😅

@savannah_grace2009

Hold your horses now😅 We can do something like Tlavian if you want, it’s just the first thing that came to my head, but does it actually match the Andromedan language we worked out some time back? If not, we can either change the langauge, or change the word.

@savannah_grace2009

I guess some of both? Like what the Andromedans would call Him, as well as new names for what the humans could call Him?

I’m assuming we’re still just thinking about the Andromedans alone, but I mean phonetically in their tongue, vs translated titles. For example, a name for Christ in Andromedan could be Tlavian (I don’t…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Let me think….yEs PlEaSe HeLp Me 😭😭😭

If you’re busy though, that’s fine no worries!

Fair enough, lol! I can help a little. So are you thinking about Andromedan language names, or English titles, or both?

@savannah_grace2009

Great chapters! I love the way you described this

worry striking a searing flame in the pit of her stomach.

And I love Cassian and Lilitu’s relationship. 🥰

@ellette-giselle
Wow, it looks great!! Thank you so much!!!

I think there’s a bit of over explaining going on with the world building (telling not showing), though it’s not as much as I typically see in early drafts.