Faith

@elishavet-pidyon

I appreciate the thoughts! I hadn’t thought much about items before – although specific things come to mind. My goal is to make this character less of a person to mourn for, and more of a person to enjoy reading about. *Bows and offers you a jar of glitter to poof yourself back home if needed*

@ellette-giselle

All good things, hopefully?

I liked these two chapters. Amber handled Jonathan very well, and I’m excited to see him have the conversation with Michael. I also want to know how their mission goes.

Why do I feel like this is the part where you might kill someone off?

@theshadow

Hey! I’m doing pretty good, how are you?

No worries, I know the end of the school year is chaotic. 😂 I’ll add you to the new doc!

Thanks! Glad you like him. 😅 He’s one of my favorites too.

Hey guys, I’ve been thinking. How do you encourage a reader to like a character who is already dead? And with minimal flashbacks? And and without being boringly sad? I have a few ideas, but this has been a challenge so far and I was wondering what everyone else thinks.

@rae

Gotcha.

Alright, here is my feedback!

~ Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?

You know Tyn and Cyrus were my favorites from the previous book. In this book, I enjoyed James and Eric (post-memory wipe), both for their enthusiasm. Iskyagus was fun as well for the brief moment he was there.

~ Were there any c…

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@ellette-giselle

I like Evan, he’s probably my favorite. The other guys sort of blend together a little for me (that might just be a me thing though.) Amber is fun too.

@ellette-giselle

Exactly.

@ellette-giselle

Yikes. Poor Jonathan.

@rae

Thanks for the update!! I’ll keep praying!

How have you been feeling?

@ellette-giselle

Good chapters!

Amber and James both have tough backstories…

Be careful out there, fellow writers 👀😂

@ellette-giselle

Evan’s story is crazy. He must sympathize with Jonathan a lot.

@highscribeofaetherium

Skitters away chaotically

AAHH GUYS

Look. I would watch them anyway to make my guy friend smile, so it’s a win-win for everybody. *Holds out hand to shake on it* I’ll watch em

I still haven’t watched Alan Becker, but one of my best friends has always been obsessed and I should watch them for the sake of making him happy. XD I have no doubt they’re good.

@linus-smallprint

Aaahh the Link drawing! 🤣🤣

@linus-smallprint

I am very much behind, but reading the rest of it all at once will give me an idea of your pacing, too. Will get to it soon and will give feedback!

The question you accused of being AI generated may be the only one on there that is not.

Bruuuhhh

@rae

I immediately thought of Marlo and Oakley. :]

@ellette-giselle

Good chapters! The rebellion is reminding me of the church meetings in my story.

Jonathan’s adjustment is pretty realistic. He’s struggling, but wants to please the people who are teaching him despite himself.

I don’t really know why they can’t just let him go–that was a bit blurry for me. I know he was captured and taken…[Read more]