Ariel Ashira

I’ll (hopefully) be writing a bit.

@rochellaine  @seekjustice  @valtmy  @jenwriter17  @alia  @bluejay  @………

@bluejay  I might be able to do it, depends on how hectic life gets. 😉 I’m interested, anyway!

@bluejay I’m working on another beta reading project at the moment, and I won’t be able to take another one on for a while. Sorry! 🙁

But I’ll tag a bunch more people for you 😉 @rochellaine @alia @ariel-ashira @daughteroftheking @kaya-young @warrenluther04 @valtmy

@seekjustice

No problem. 🙂 Take everything I say with a grain of salt though because I belong to the “Begin as late as you can and leave as early as possible” and the “If the reader has likely read a hundred other such scenes and can imagine what will happen, don’t show it” schools of thought… which I don’t think is very suitable to your…[Read more]

@valtmy

Thanks very much for your thoughts! I’ll definitely keep all those things in mind as I start my outline again 😀

(I would write a much longer reply, but my brain is super fuzzy and honestly not working that great 😛 )

@seekjustice

All right. I read it and liked what you have so far. 🙂 Here are some thoughts I have that may help you. I think this may be more suited to assist with refining a first draft to a second draft but hopefully some of it can apply to a Draft 1.5 as well.

#1: Word count is about 9k which I think is fair for the set-up of a 90-100k…[Read more]

@valtmy I put it in another post.

I was planning for it to be 90-100k.

@seekjustice

I can’t find the link?

By the way, just to get an idea on the proper pacing, can you let me know how many words you’re planning to have for this novel?

@valtmy And I didn’t put the link in. *sighs*

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1r6o7qfNjHWGPEhU2XHHEU75aILwtQc61okrxZGZ6nJg/edit?usp=sharing

@valtmy

Here’s the link. If you want, I can add more chapters when you’re done.

(Also, this is actually most of the stuff I wrote before NaNo. And it took me a while to pin down a good way to write Courageous’ stammer, so it is incredibly annoying in the first few chapters and I haven’t bothered to edit it yet).

@seekjustice

All right, a few chapters won’t take too long. Not sure how much insight I can glean from that but I’ll do my best. It’s in my interest to help you get Wattle Fire done as soon as possible after all. 😛

@valtmy

If you’d like, I can put the first few chapters or so in a google doc for you to have a look at.

Only if won’t distract you too much for QoD.

@seekjustice

Hmm… tough. I’ll offer to help if you let me take a look at your 50% NaNo draft so that I can try to see what exactly are the issues here… (An excuse to ask you to let me read some of Wattle Fire early!) 😛

But since I don’t know the full extent of your outline and what you have planned, I’m not sure any advice from me would be…[Read more]

@valtmy

….All of the above?

Seriously, I feel like it has every problem under the sun.

@seekjustice

I see. What’s the main issue you’re facing on that? The pacing, the logical flow of events, the scene structure…?

I realised that I have jumbled up the sequence of one or two scenes for QOD in Part 2 so the story does not necessarily progress in a linear fashion and am wondering whether I should change that. But that’s an issue…[Read more]

@valtmy

That’s good news 🙂

I’m currently planning out all the scenes on my corkboard, trying to get something to kind of work.

@seekjustice

Can’t wait for Part 3? 😉
I have tidied things up and filled in some of the blanks I had initially left but I think I have to write a few more scenes for Chapter 9.

How’s Wattle Fire coming along?

@Valtmy

Well, the phone screen was spattered with foam once I finished 😛

How’s QoD coming along?

@seekjustice

I would ask how exactly you’re able to come onto the forum while “in the throes of washing up” but considering that I once played the character game with you while soaking in a pool, I guess I’ll refrain.

All right, see you later. 🙂

@valtmy

I’m currently in the throes of washing up (😝 ), but I’m sure I’ll end up back here eventually.