Ariel Ashira

@rochellaine Great topic idea!

Oh! *faints* that quote makes so. much. sense. it’s beautiful 😊

Here’s a quote I found.

I don’t know who Charles de Lint is, but I really like this quote. We each have a unique voice and style, we just have to embrace it.

I’m gonna tag more people: @jane-maree @mariposa @dekreel @daeus @aratrea @radically-surren…[Read more]

@rochellaine Great topic idea!

Oh! *faints* that quote makes so. much. sense. it’s beautiful 😊

Here’s a quote I found.

I don’t know who Charles de Lint is, but I really like this quote. We each have a unique voice and style, we just have to embrace it.

I’m gonna tag more people: @jane-maree @mariposa @dekreel @daeus @aratrea @radically-surren…[Read more]

*sighs in relief* Thanks, @catwing !

(What can I say? I haven’t seen Frozen in a long time) XD

@daeus The survey was fun actually! I’m gonna tag some more people just in case they don’t know about this.

@mariposa @jane-maree @radically-surrendered @skredder @livgiordano @jessi-rae @sarah-anson @sam-kowal @seekjustice @rochellaine @dekreel @warrenluther04 @dragon-snapper @daughteroftheking @notawriter @that_writer_girl_99 @kaya-young @waterl…[Read more]

@itisastarrynight  Awww! Thank you! She’s awesome!

@dekreel @dragon-snapper @daughteroftheking The rumor weed has taken over the thread! ;P
Wow… let’s add some Frozen! *smirks*
“Go back home. Your life awaits. Go enjoy the sun and open up the gate. Just stay away and you’ll be safe from me.”
“Actually we’re not”
“What do you mean we’re not”
“I get the feeling you don’t know.”
“What do I not…[Read more]

Hopefully this one isn’t as tall… *cough*

Thapis from Firebird.
… He kinda looks like that.
He’s in the army on the island. 😀

@dekreel I like the hat one best too.
@Sarah-anson … It’s “Shoo! Go write a graphic novel so people can read it!” good. 😛
@warrenluther04 Awww… That’s cool! You could make the text bigger though. 😀

@itisastarrynight That is really good!

@daeus Great idea! It’s really easy to sort of fall into a rant about what you don’t like in fiction, at least for me. I didn’t find anything typo-related. I’d be happy to share it with some people. 😀

As part of the survey, do you then write the better book that the survey-taker has dreamed about? Or do you just leave them hanging? XD

@nicolerivers03 Wow! that’s really interesting. Nice rhyme structure!

@daeus COOL! I really like it 😀

Everything looked fine to me 🙂 Good job!

@notawriter I just had a great thought.  I used to read a lot of old westerns, (Zane Grey, William MacLeod Raine, B. M. Bower,) and am trying to write this with the same type of storyline, but modernized.  But when I read those books, I was looking for entertainment, and not for themes and character arcs.  I mean, I noticed those things in the ba…[Read more]

@notawriter Thank you so much for your feedback!  In response:

Goals and Motivations/Conflict I am actually having a little trouble with this one.  My idea of her is that she is not confident – loses her sense of direction very easily, and so is very afraid of having to take care of herself – and that she has a hard time with her self-image be…[Read more]

@rochellaine
Oh yeah, P.s I suppose.. I just wanted to say I realize, that was only the first few pages so I don’t mean to imply your story doesn’t have those first few things I mentioned.  You just might want to introduce those elements sooner, or foreshadow them?

@kate-flournoy @dragon-snapper @catwing @sam-kowal @seekjustice @mariposa @daughteroftheking @dekreel @jenwriter17 @that_writer_girl_99

Whoa, I think that’s the longest post I’ve ever made. o-o

@rochellaine
Alright! I just finished reading it, and overall I liked it! There were a few things that stuck out to me though.

Okay the two main things, its not very clear what her goals or motivations are. (Which is something that can weaken what would otherwise be a really strong character)

And then there doesn’t seem to be any source of [Read more]