Ariel Ashira

@catwing Goodnight!

@seekjustice @jess-penrose I’m actually going to say goodbye now too.  I don’t know if I’ll be back tonight, but probably not.  So goodnight!

@jess-penrose

Ah no, I don’t think she did. It was fun anyway though!

@jess-penrose 🙂

@catwing I have trouble with showing not telling as well, so much of my editing involves fixing it! You are not alone in this struggle!

@Rochellaine i don’t think we were supposed to, but Jess did and I liked my last line so I did too!

I hope your confusion lessens some time soon 🙂

@seekjustice Yes…Someday. 😛  Of course I thank you!  But my fingers are feeling confused right now, since they don’t know where to go.

@jess-penrose Oh, are we supposed to give our last lines?  I’ve never done that before.  But mine was kind of weird… “With a quick shove, Chara managed to stand up, and then toppled…”  😉 😀

@jess-penrose Yeah, I have trouble showing, not telling. 🙁
Maybe after I go through all these and get the revised doc to you. I’m revising it in a different doc. 🙂
Just wondering, did you think I needed to develop the characters more?

@rochellaine @seekjustice I have to go to bed. Good night.

@jess-penrose

My last line was:

above the din came Errol’s voice, but I could not distinguish his words from the rest of the chaos.

your last line is very interesting too 😉

@Rochellaine

Sorry, you’ll thank me one day though (or maybe not)

Ohh…I just realized that I usually do fifteen minute word wars, so that makes me feel a little bit better. 🙂  But still.  I usually get at least four hundred words in a ten minute war.

@jess-penrose Okay.  That was the absolute worst performance I have ever given in a word war!  I got 203 words written, which I believe is half of my lowest score ever!

@seekjustice I am going to blame you. 😉  After all that horrible slashing and cutting you did to my story I hardly know where I am anymore! 😛

@jess-penrose @rochellaine

Me too! I got 375. How’d you guys go?

@jess-penrose @rochellaine

Ten minutes, sounds good!

@seekjustice Unfortunately I’m editing, so no Word War.
@jesspenrose Yes I’m curing all those zombies you pointed out. Thanks again. 🙂

@jess-penrose @seekjustice Ending at :26 works for me.

@seekjustice Sure!  Maybe then I’ll get some writing in. 🙂  How long?

@jess-penrose

Yeah, mate 😉

@catwing @jess-penrose @rochellaine

Would anyone like a word war???

@seekjustice It has. 🙂
@jesspenrose welcome! I’m finally going through those notes you left me. XP
@rochellaine *laughs* Oh that’s hard.

@seekjustice @catwing Hi!  I’m attempting to convince myself to decide to write… 😛

@Catwing cool! Its been ages since I’ve seen you 🙂

@seekjustice I’m editing Finding Secrets. 😛

@skredder @alia @Rochellaine @anyone

I’m writing? Would anyone like to join me?