Ariel Ashira

@valtmy

Never mind 🙂 People often point out my own misinterpretations of my own writing. At least you can be excused for mixing up minor details 😛

Well, originally he was there to get around the plot hole in Les Mis–the fact that no one recognised Javert until it was convenient, even though there were three people at least who should have…[Read more]

@seekjustice

Oh. I must have been dozing off when I read that part 😂

But my suggestions for Mathias are the same. Figure out what his motivations are, maybe think about how his relationship with his superior officer Caderousse and his fellow soldiers are etc. So far to me Mathias feels rather unnecessary. He seems to be there just to show that…[Read more]

@valtmy

That’s good! I hope things make more sense in the second draft.

Well…that wasn’t Mathias who let them go. That was one of the wharf men.

Observe (that word makes me feel smart, you see):

Instead I met the eyes of a bearded man who looked even more startled than I did. His mouth was open, and he was staring down at Rain and I…

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@seekjustice

Hey. Great to know that they are going to be fixed! I’m really looking forward to reading your second draft now! 😊

For Mathias, I guess you can start by thinking up of a believable motivation for him much like Caderousse. Why is he serving in an immoral legal system? Why did he let Chessy and Rain go instead of reporting them to C…[Read more]

@rochellaine

Cool! I’ll see if I can get it to post now!

Ooh what soundtrack?

@seekjustice Oh, wow!!  Please send it over!  I don’t know how much I’ll read tonight, since I’ve got to get up around 5:30 tomorrow, but I might read it tomorrow in the car or something.  (My dad’s speaking at a church a few hours away, so we’ve got to leave by 6:30.)

I listened to a new soundtrack today… 😉

@valtmy @rochellaine

Sorry for the late reply, I was out all day yesterday and have only just got back from church now.

Basically, I fixed most of the things you pointed out Valtmy, in the second draft and I fixed it quite simply. Unfortunately though, I don’t know what to do with character of Mathias. :/

I agree with pretty much everything you…[Read more]

@rochellaine yeah that was Gideon that said that. 😀 that was funny!

@rochellaine

OK it’s good that that’s going to be fixed in the next draft. 😀

I read your fanfics! They are really sweet and cute! 😊

@jenwriter17 Oh, I love Gideon too!!  He’s adorable.  So cute, especially when he…uh…every scene… 😛  But I love it when he dances with Milly in the “Goin’ Courtin'” scene.  And when he says “nice night for coon huntin'” as a “sweet thing.” 😛 (that was him, right?  It’s been a while.)

That actor is one of my favorite actors as well.  Funny…[Read more]

@valtmy Sorry, I went to sleep early last night, so I’m replying now. 🙂

Ah, haha.  Now that I put you through all the trouble of explaining I suddenly remembered that SeekJustice put a big backstory scene in with Maria in the second draft. 😛  I think she’s already thought through all those issues and will fix them as she finishes the second d…[Read more]

@rochellaine

As I have said, I am fine with the sparing of Mathias. The contrived resolution I am speaking of is the resolution to the Caderousse-Chessy conflict which is resolved with Caderousse, much like Javert, letting Chessy go and committing suicide later. In the original Les Mis, this was a fitting and sufficient resolution because of…[Read more]

@jenwriter17 I rode English before I moved last year, but now I ride Western. It’s different. 😉 There were a lot of months in between moving and finding this place. I think I’m back though.
And we don’t just learn riding, we learn about the horses so that’s fun. (Since I hope to have a horse some day)

@catwing Glad it went well. Sorry about the sunburn and things though. 🙁

Do you ride western or english? I ride english, and jump some too. 🙂

@rochellaine Oh yes, I love his voice! I really like deep voices. 🙂

I really like “Bless Yore Beautiful Hide” too. Maybe that’s my favorite 😉

I also liked Gideon, forgot to mention him.

@jenwriter17 Oh, I do too!  Jane Powell, (Milly,) is one of my absolute favorite female singers.  Possibly my favorite, but I never can decide… 😛

My favorite song is probably “Bless Yore Beautiful Hide.”  (What do you think of Howard Keel’s voice?  It’s really deep and cool sounding, isn’t it?  Or do you prefer tenors?)  But all the songs are amazing.

@Daughteroftheking @jenwriter17
It went pretty well, not perfect but we made it. At one point some people were cheering the name of our club (they did this for everyone as they passed them) which has the name of one of the horses in it, so he kinda backed up and spooked a little bit. They stopped then so everyone was fine. 🙂
Basically it was fun…[Read more]

@rochellaine

I really like Millie! A favorite song…that…that will take some time to decide. 😉

@valtmy I have never fully read Les Mis, actually.  I’ve skimmed it and read parts of it, and read the synopsis several times, so I know a lot of the story, but I would say I could probably give a pretty near perspective of a reader who hasn’t read Les Mis. 😉  What “contrived resolution” are you referring to?  Because you mentioned several th…[Read more]

@rochellaine

Thanks! I’ll read them later. 😀

Oh no, not really. I’ll go check the comments out later if I have the time.

I was not expecting a full blown Valjean-Javert conflict. But Chessy (along with her father) is sort of like Valjean with the unjust hard labour and all that. To me, SeekJustice is writing this from a ‘Valjean’ perspective…[Read more]