Aranel

Okay but actually….any of you guys that have read my book…

is it too dark??

I’m being legit…cuz now I’m scared…

not to take the focus off Whaley but all these concerns about stories being dark has got me paranoid

@whalekeeper @loopylin

Girl are you psychic or something? Because I couldn’t figure out exactly how I felt about Chase’s sacrifice until you just voiced it.

Exactly!!!! XD XD

@rae

Okay…after reading it again and reading the other’s comments…

I completely agree with @whaley and @loopy.

Chase has always kind of bothered me for the exact reason that Loopy said, but I couldn’t put it into words until I saw her post.

It doesn’t ever seem like he’s being “kind” because all it is is him beating himself up and feeling…[Read more]

@loopylin

I’m listening to it now XD XD

@theshadow

hey, I know you read the first couple chapters! I’d love to hear your thoughts/critiques on the recent chapters if you have any! But if you’re busy I totally get it, summer can be soooo hectic!

Instead of digging through all these posts, you can use this link to view the whole novel (what I’ve revised so…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Do you have any other thoughts on the chapters you’ve read?

Chapter 12

A Law

The sight that greeted Lilitu was like a cold slap in the face.

In front of the church stood three Pythonos, each with a dark horse by their side.

Jraldath, Selena, and Rrath.

A chill went down Lilitu’s spine. Unfortunately, the trio’s reputation preceded them—and it was covered with the blood of innocent victims.

The bells…[Read more]

@theducktator

Why do you always have the BEST memes?!?! Those are great XD

@whalekeeper

Girlll for a second I was scared you were gonna talk about my story and I was scared XD

yeah that’s hard.

I would just encourage her to talk to her parents about it. Maybe just gently talk to her about your concerns? She might (and will probably) get defensive, but still it’s worth a shot if you care about her that much.

I’m not…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Yeah I’ll think about doing something like that.

Again, sorry if that scene made you uncomfortable (or anyone else!)! <3

And thanks for reading my stuff!

@rae

Aww that scene was sooo cute! <3

@keilah-h

No no no! You didn’t offend me! I just felt bad for posting it XD

And you’re good I wasn’t upset or offended at all…I just you know, felt bad, and I’m sorry if that scene made you uncomfortable :/

I’m just saying that if I had picked up your fully written, published book and read it through, I might’ve felt a little iffy about the…

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@highscribeofaetherium

Thank you for reading them!!!!!!!!!!!!! That means a lot <3

@grcr

WHY DON’T YOU LIKE IT

I love it so much!!

I think I’m going to keep it the same for now, and then change it if I feel like it XD

@whalekeeper

you need people to believe in you, even if you can’t sometimes. I have low self-esteem sometimes and I need my mom to put me back on track. If we tell ourselves we are worth nothing, that’s going to have mental consequences later down the road.

Yes yes yes! That’s exactly what I was going for!

As someone who completely relates to Sef…[Read more]

@anyone

Chapter 11

Wolves

“Sef?”

Sef looked up from sweeping the floor, and saw Neveah standing in the doorway.

“What is it?”

“We’re forgetting something,” Neveah smiled wryly.

“Forgetting something?” Sef repeated, confused.

“Yes. We’re forgetting to think of names for the child.”

A knot of anger grew in Sef’s stomach.

“We’re going to…[Read more]

@jonas

This phrasing sounds a bit awkward.

I’m cringing…

WHYYY

apparently I didn’t edit it as well as I thought…

Ooops yeah I’ll fix that.

That’s a lot of “that”s.

NOOOO I’M CRINGING AGAIN

what was I thinking?!? I just committed a crime…to use the same word three times in a sentence…how could I?!?!

By this point, you’ve managed to conv…

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