Aranel

@linus-smallprint

Oooh! You use Reedsy too?!?!

I’M NOT THE ONLY ONE!!!
How do you like it??

@hybridlore

Thank you soooo much!!! <3

@anyone-who-wishes-to-read

Chapter 7

Rage

Pain.

A distant, ever present throbbing at the base of Lilitu’s neck.

On your feet, he warned himself, or you’re dead. He put his weight on his bad foot and screamed in agony before he could stifle it.

Blue blood oozed from his numerous cuts, the edges searing like fire.

Lilitu scrambled back to…[Read more]

@jonas

you want an em dash instead of a hyphen

Noted. Thank you!!!

Maybe this will be explained at some point, but it isn’t clear why the Paynes being moved to this new district would mean she doesn’t see them anymore, did they just move to completely different areas?

She doesn’t see them anymore because both she and them are always working, the…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Let me think….yEs PlEaSe HeLp Me 😭😭😭

If you’re busy though, that’s fine no worries!

@rae

Sef

“You’re like my mom.”

She caught Chase staring, and giggled.

“Is that a good thing or a bad thing?”

She stroked the bird with her finger again.

@calyhuge

Sounds great XD I’m kinda excited!!!

@rae

Omc I’m so sorry…give me a second…I forgot AND I’ve been on a break for four days :/

@ellette-giselle

Omc where do you find all these quotes? I love them!

@ellette-giselle

Oops I forgot to mention that I deleted the scene with her not wanting to talk to the Great One…so now it’s just the scene with her and Lilitu pretending to be animals.

I really liked it so I put it into the “scene recycling bin” if I need it again, but for now it’s not in the draft.

@everyone

Sixth Chapter!!!

Chapter 6

A Voice

Lir stretched out as far as the eye could see-the crown jewel of Andromeda, the pride of the Pythonos.

Sef stood on the hilltop, overlooking the city, taking in the sights and smells as if she were starving, though she knew she’d never be able to partake in the beauty of it all.

Paynes w…[Read more]

@esther-c

I honestly don’t know XD

Here’s the link you can use (but there’s not a lot of “new chapters”…and the first couple “new” chapters need a lot of redoing, but you can read ahead if you want! Just keep in mind that if you critique them, I’ve seen a lot of the problems already. The new chapters I’m talking about are…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Aww tysm girl that means a lot!!!

And so true!!!!!!

@esther-c

Livia

“I’m an Aquino,” she shrugged. “I was born with it.”

She formed a miniature waterspout over her hands and watched it whirl, then letting it fall into a small puddle at her feet.

@ellette-giselle

Oh no! I’m so sorry again…

I need to spend some time with my sister, we’re about to do a Bible study!

I feel sooo bad, but I have to go….I’m sorry!

It’s writing nonstop until whatever time you set. Like I usually go for fifteen to thirty minutes, and write about 1-2K words if I get enough inspiration.

If you want, you can…[Read more]

@grcr

Aww thanks girl <3

@ellette-giselle

Don’t be sad!!!! I only thought of it because the whole scene felt winter and cold and dead to me. Like those feelings just mirrored Sef’s. It was you writing her so well that made me think of it. Actually, the other day i was thinking, “Man, she is so good! Look at hers compared to mine!” lol.

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@ellette-giselle

Oh no I’m so sorry…I didn’t see this!!!

Could we maybe still do it now??

I understand if you can’t XD

@ellette-giselle

I like that!!!!!!

YES I WOULD LOVE TO SEE THE COVER

@ellette-giselle

I would love to! I don’t know if I’ll have much time but I’ll try!

@jonas

Yeah, you could do them as separate chapters, and that should work. But also, be careful about waiting too long before launching into the bulk of the story. I don’t believe we’ve even reached the inciting incident yet, and you don’t want the reader to be thinking “let’s just get on with it!” You probably still have a little bit of wiggle r…

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