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Snapper replied to the topic Shorty Story – Mystery in the forum Short Story Critiques 9 years, 4 months ago
@f5a8c3e92 (sorry, just trying to tag you. 😛 )
Nuts. Did I really type the title as Shorty?
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Snapper replied to the topic Shorty Story – Mystery in the forum Short Story Critiques 9 years, 4 months ago
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Snapper replied to the topic Shorty Story – Mystery in the forum Short Story Critiques 9 years, 4 months ago
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Snapper started the topic Shorty Story – Mystery in the forum 9 years, 4 months ago
Hi guys! @daeus @kate-flournoy @that_writer_girl_99 @ethryndal @aratrea @rolena-hatfield @f5a8c3e9 @hope @perfectfifths @winter-rose @jess @emma-flournoy @northerner @overcomer @anyone else
So, I working on a short story mystery for a contest due this month, and I was wondering if you all could critique this for me. It’s 970 words or so, and…[Read more] -
Snapper started the topic Shorty Story – Mystery in the forum 9 years, 4 months ago
Hi guys! @daeus @kate-flournoy @that_writer_girl_99 @ethryndal @aratrea @rolena-hatfield @f5a8c3e9 @hope @perfectfifths @winter-rose @jess @emma-flournoy @northerner @overcomer @anyone else
So, I working on a short story mystery for a contest due this month, and I was wondering if you all could critique this for me. It’s 970 words or so, and can’t…[Read more] -
Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Novel Excerpt (Feedback Welcome) in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
Thanks @DelightInLife. 😀 It took me forever to get that actually… :/
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Novel Excerpt (Feedback Welcome) in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
I didn’t write that, and I don’t think I can right now. I’m not that good.
*wise Yoda look* That— is why you fail.
*goes off into gales of smothered laughter* Okay, okay… so it’s not that drastic. I have a reputation to live up to apparently, though, so… *shrugs*
No, you’ve got enough humility to sink a ship.…[Read more]
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Writer's corner #5 in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
@Daeus awesome. I got 506 words written. 🙂 See ya.
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Novel Excerpt (Feedback Welcome) in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
Also, see how much I told you by not telling? *grins*
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Novel Excerpt (Feedback Welcome) in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
@That_Writer_Girl_99 Ahhh… yes. You’re POV telling. That makes it boring and dull; you’re right. See, what you’re doing is giving us Kara’s thoughts instead of showing us her emotions through the way she acts. Instead of doing this:
That was strange. I think to myself as I—finally—enter my cell. I wonder what Matthias was talking about?
I tak… -
Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Novel Excerpt (Feedback Welcome) in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Novel Excerpt (Feedback Welcome) in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
Glad to hear it. 😉
Okay. You need help. Just getting to a good place to start? Prioritizing your ideas? What?
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Writer's corner #5 in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
@That_Writer_Girl_99 Yyyyyes???
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Novel Excerpt (Feedback Welcome) in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
@That_Writer_Girl_99 heh. Yes indeed. 🙂
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Writer's corner #5 in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
@Daeus @That_Writer_Girl_99 can I join you for a bit? I got permission to do some writing in the daytime and so I’m going to be working on my climax until around four. 😀
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Novel Excerpt (Feedback Welcome) in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
@That_Writer_Girl_99 here… have a snippet to give you a few ideas.
That was it. They could do whatever they liked about him. But they were not going to touch Denholm. A murderous spark ignited at the base of his throat, and suddenly a great warm, eager humming swelled and filled his mind, pressing outward through the boundaries and seeking an…
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Novel Excerpt (Feedback Welcome) in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
@That_Writer_Girl_99 ha! 😀 I can get on board with that… *stands heroically on the verge of a deserted island with the wind streaming through her hair and her weird Jedi robes* May the force be with you. 😛 😉
Ahhhh… yes. Elemental fight scenes. *laughs* I can so relate. The MC of my WIP is also a fire Elemental, though not in the same way…[Read more]
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Character Art Exchange in the forum Art 9 years, 4 months ago
@GracieGirl yep. And it’s usually the protagonist. *scowls*
Also, I named the character I chose her for… Ira Netzen. *grins* This poor girl is going to have such a split personality… 😛 XD
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Novel Excerpt (Feedback Welcome) in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 4 months ago
@That_Writer_Girl_99 well, any backstory you might want to fill in. Hints at the Warden’s involvement with the Elementals. (Which could also double as foreshadowing). Stories about the Catastrophes… little pieces of silence to fill in the things that Matthias knows, as a spy of the Warden, but isn’t allowed to tell the others. Just to deepen the…[Read more]
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Ethryndal replied to the topic Character Art Exchange in the forum Art 9 years, 4 months ago
@I-J-Anderson It is beyond me how anyone can be so stinkin’ good. WOW. Your talent is unbelievable.
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