Hannah

Makes sense. Got it completely.

Hm. But I thought that was all a given.

It is, after all, called… get this… a cliffhanger.

That pr-etty much sums it up.

In my opinion.

Which has been wrong on more than one occasion. 😛

But how much is too much and how tense is too tense?
I don’t think you should leave off with absolutely NOTHING…[Read more]

Actually, the lack of words there makes Ezra’s point. 😛 Leave them wanting a vital piece of the story that you didn’t give them. Something should be missing/in question at pretty much any given part of the story.

Thanks, @kate-flournoy! 🙂 Yeah, both those lines were not sitting quite well. I’ll make those changes.
Do you think there’s a better word with the same syllables I can use instead of “harmless”?

*Bites nails, hovers on edge of seat and tears and frazzled hair* Come on Ezra! What were you going to say? Huh? HUH!? Tell me!!!!!! I WANNA KNOW! Don’t leave me in suspense!!!!!!!!!!

OOOOOOOOOOhhhhhhhhhhhhhh… wait. I get it now.

It was a cliff hanger. 😛

XD. Niiiiiiiiiiiiiice, Ezra.

Perhaps you would condescend to enlighten me, Daniel.

@Daeus— no, it’s actually by an author who has a lot of similarities with Douglas Bond— John J. Horn. Have you heard of him?

Okay, thanks for explaining your cliffhanger. That makes sense too. I see what you’re saying.

Thanks for joining us, @Ezra-wilkinson! Ahem… I trust you have something to contribute…?

😉

Good thoughts, @hope!

@Daeus, it sounds like you might be talking about ending on a cliffhanger right in the middle of an action scene. That’s probably not a good idea, because everything has been going at such a fast pace that an end will fall on you like a thunderclap and leave you screaming without any motivation to go on. Because, if anyone…[Read more]

Oh my, this brings back so many memories! I used to do this ALL THE TIME when I was younger, only it wasn’t lava— it was a river full of poisonous leeches. 😛

I noticed a few lines that could have flowed better. For one,

Balancing on the wall trimming works for a bit

Try ‘To walk on the wall trim will work for a bit’

Also,

Guys, that…

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I think most of it figured out now. Thanks. 😉

Also, when I think of futuristic stuff, I think of lots of cameras. Very tiny but high quality cameras that can be stuck in corners of rooms or flown around on tiny drones (or drones that look like animals).

I think one way to write a good cliffhanger is to reveal a sudden twist and then break off as everyone is staring at the character who’s revealed himself (or whatever). If it’s a chapter end, you could go to someone else in the next chapter (if you have more than one pov). Or you could end a book that way. That’s what I’m doing in the second book…[Read more]

Yes! I am. Word limits are the bane of my existence, but it’s good to practice squeezing as much meaning as you can into as few words as possible. It’ll improve us in the end.

At least, that’s a good thing to tell myself.

You got it. That works great.

Okay. I’ll play around with it and see what I can come up with. Thanks!