Hannah

This is AWESOME. You guys have done so much since I was gone. It’s looking great. *Stares into the distance and dreams of mango*
@daeus @faithdk @kate-flournoy

@Daeus humph. 😀

@Daeus, thanks so much for critiquing it! 🙂

Thanks for reading and critiquing it, @kate-flournoy! 🙂

Yes @gretald, much better! 😀 I’m getting a lot more imagery this time around, not just a vague sense of what happened. Good work!

An archeologist…seven hundred and fifty years in the future. 😉

All right, @Daeus and @kate-flournoy. I’ve edited some. It’s still not quite done, but if you have time, would you mind reading it through? If you don’t have time, that’s perfectly fine.
@kate-flournoy, Is the showing vs. telling problem better? *looks hopeful*

The day of my thirteenth birthday I met my true love. I invited my entire…

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All right, @Daeus and @kate-flournoy. I’ve edited some. It’s still not quite done, but if you have time, would you mind reading it through? If you don’t have time, that’s perfectly fine.
@kate-flournoy, Is the showing vs. telling problem better? *looks hopeful*

The day of my thirteenth birthday I met my true love. I invited my entire…

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@Daeus oh! Now I get it— very clever. 😀

No, really.

My fault I didn’t get it at first. 😉 My head must be screwed on front-ways for once, making my brain very sluggish. *chuckles*

@Daeus oh! Now I get it— very clever. 😀

No, really.

My fault I didn’t get it. 😉 My head must be screwed on front-ways for once, making my brain very sluggish. *chuckles*

@Daeus… what?

@Daeus what?

I just realized we both switched meter in those last two verses… It’s neat how we do that without even realizing, isn’t it?

@Daeus

And then we have knightings,
And sparrings with words,
Though sometimes those sparrings
Grow rather absurd.

@bluejay get over here, we’re ruining your topic. 😀

@Daeus

*urgggggghhhh* *facepalm*
Either you deliberately misconstrue my words, or my computer does.

No prizes for guessing which. 😉

‘I hammered into Google
‘Christian writing teens’;
It brought me to this awesome site—
The website of my dreams.

Excitedly I clicked the link,
And had a look around.
I eagerly perused the forum
And squealed at what…

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Per-fect-o-mungo.

Yes. That is a word.

Oooh, hm… let’s see @bluejay…

‘I hammered into Google
‘Christian writing teens’;
It brought me to this awesome site—
The website of my dreams.

Excitedly I clicked the link,
and had a look around.
I eagerly perused the forum
and squealed at what I found.

I signed up straight away;
of this site became a member.
My password was sent…

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@Hannah-c, Thank you! 😀 🙂 😉