Allison

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@freed_and_redeemed

Rae actually asked this same question a while back, and what she told you is basically what I would’ve said. Koshka’s advice was really good too. So yeah, I basically have nothing else to add. I feel like they covered everything I can think of. 😉

@theducktator

Ooh we did!! We were right in the path of totality. It was amazing!! Definitely unforgettable! I don’t even know how to describe it. Because the lighting kept getting funky, it was a little eerie, until it got as dark as it is right when the sun dips below the horizon. It’s so cool!!

@rae

1. I don’t think the scene is too short. I do have to wonder if it is necessary though. It’s hard to say without context, but it doesn’t seem to move the plot forward really. I also would consider that the reader is likely expecting to hear Nahim’s backstory and feel like they’re being cheated out of it.

2. No, I think it’s fine.

3. Yes. I…[Read more]

@rae

Helloooo, I’m heeeeere

1. Feels like average length to me! Then again it isn’t in book format on KP, and is one continuous page, so I may be gauging it incorrectly. I think if it’s 2-3 pages long on your document, that feels adequate.

2. If it’s the end of a chapter, it works as a summary. If not, I don’t think it’s too abrupt to have in…[Read more]

@rae

Maybe they have to find a special macguffin in the middle of this fairy tale land, that will effectively send them back home? Like Oz? And creatures keep attacking them to protect the special artifact? Just spitting ideas here lol.

@loopylin @rae

There are at least five good teachers tho! There’s Mr. Gregory ofc. Then there’s the art teacher with the red and yellow scarf, Miss Soleil, and the two dance instructors with a romance subplot.

…Granted, I created all of these characters XD But nice adults are underrated in fiction and deserve screentime.
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The twins and…[Read more]

I’d RP but I inspiration levels are at -5 right now.

@rae

AHHHHHH NOT SKINWALKERS!!!!

*hides in corner*

@rae does he use “bullets” as an exclamation? That’s hilarious.

Jaylen

Someone barged in as she tried to figure out what exactly was going on.

“Freeze! Wait…are you a Fettian?! I thought I was the only one around here! Bullets, another Fettian ruining my fun. Well, don’t say I’m breaking any rules at any point in time cuz I’m not despite p…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed I will not be mad at you for torturing a beloved character. I’ll be mad at the ones torturing him, but not at you.

I do the same way too much. Just two days ago, I was listening to video game character death screams extracted from their games and imagining what circumstances in an actual linear story situation would…[Read more]

@lightoverdarkness6 @elishavet-pidyon @grcr thank y’all so much!! It means a lot to me that y’all would read the scene and offer some thoughts 💖💖💖

@esther-c @whalekeeper @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @rae @joy-calle @keilah-h @anyone-else-idk-lol

Sooooo I’m currently working on a scene for one of my novels…and I need some advice😅

The two MCs of this novel have both been imprisoned by Soviet Forces (this is 1950s East Germany, btw) for being involved in the underground church.

It’s…[Read more]

@theducktator My family had some eclipse glasses left over from the October eclipse (which happened to be on my brother’s birthday lol), so we watched for a bit.

@highscribeofaetherium haha, depending on where you live you won’t have to wait that long. Down in Florida where I’m at, we had one last year also, and seven or eight years ago too.

I’m concerned about the urges I’m getting to look up and check how the eclipse is coming along.

@theducktator

Neat!

@theducktator

No 🙁 it’s supposed to be pretty good where we are, but we couldn’t get any glasses. I guess I’ll have to wait another twenty years.

@grcr

YESSSSSSS!! I HAVE A FACE ONCE AGAIN!!

TAKE THAT, WYOH!!

Profile pics are back!! Finally! 😅

@mineralizedwritings

Don’t apologize! There’s nothing wrong with not being active at all. I haven’t been active much either, school and drawing are just a little more important lol. But I do like to come on and chat sometimes XD

Thanks girl ☺ Haha yes! Same here 🙂

That’s so awesome! I’m so happy for you girl! : )

Tysm <33

Thanks for asking! &…

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