Allison

@rae Here’s my Tenz drawing! I decided to only do his head because otherwise it would’ve taken me hours to both draw and color.

@rae I’ve been observing for a while. Wanted to get to the actual dance bit

@rae

I’d RP if anyone wanted to do something.

@calyhuge

I’m good with it if Sara is!

@ellette-giselle

Love the boards!!

@ellette-giselle

😀 XD

ooo the other boards look good too! The temporarily misplaced quote is funny XD

Oh that’s ok. I was more looking for general response as a reader, not so much critical  feedback as of yet. (though it’s always welcome.)

Ah, ok! 😀

@ellette-giselle

I think it’s good! Intriguing. I don’t really have any thoughts in a critical sense, and I’m not the best person to ask… but I do like it! The last part was pretty sad to read!

Ugh, I’m sorry that it took me a while to respond…😓😓

(also I love the board!)

Like literally, Hallie looks so pretty and Easton is practically perfect!!

@ellette-giselle

Ahhh!!! They look so good!! 😍 Thank you thank you thank you!!! 🥰

@savannah_grace2009

So I really want to keep reading your story, and I need to double check—are the chapters you’re sharing on here in the Reedsy link you shared with me? Or is the link an older draft?

@ellette-giselle

I would love to see them!!

@rae

For one, these aren’t normal swords. For two, for most Realn it’s a matter of learning the skill and carrying one for sake of tradition. Some have ancient blades, but that’s rare. Nahim wears one (actually two right now) cuz his training master was Master Dare who was famous for saving the dragons from extinction and for his swordplay, and h…

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@rae

Sorry, this is a bit late, but here’s a critique as requested.

The opponent blocked, swinging its second sword

I was a bit confused why you used ‘its’ as the pronoun here. After finishing the paragraph, I realized that it must be some sort of virtual opponent, but I did read over the sentence a couple times in confusion before reading on and…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @savannah_grace2009

Writing sprints are really fun! So are crawls… which is something similar, but it’s longer and more involved. I’ve been doing some of those over at the King’s Daughters’ Writing Camp. (Which y’all should check out! It’s awesome!!)

@savannah_grace2009

Lukas 

“Woah,” he breathed, watching Liv’s complete control over the water. “Cool.” He half-smiled.

I’m kinda stuck now, lol. We can keep their conversation going or end it here if you want. Or maybe we can have them meet up with some other peeps.

@rae

Oh, I also read your scene for Chase’s book. Don’t really have any comments, but I like it. Nice title, too.

@rae

I read your scene, and overall, I think it’s really good. I’m not very good at critiquing, but I did want to mention just a couple things I noticed.

One, Mandin said it would take Nahim several minutes to defeat an opponent with a sword. Exchanges with swords actually usually last for a handful of seconds.

(Btw, do you have an in-…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Just wanted to pop in and say I love how this is going! Cassian is a much better character imo now that I’ve seen him with Sef.

I know it’s super hard not to doubt yourself and your writing…. I think it’s just a writer thing. And it’s hard when it seems so easy for other people. But it doesn’t have to be perfect right now.…[Read more]